on Our world by 47Ronin
27 Jan 2004, 7:44 AM
there is a sound to irony, and this is not far off.
on Acrylic Sunrise by MacFrantic
9 Jan 2004, 1:43 PM
LSD?!
pink, orange, gold, amber.
Not bad but I have never seen midnight grey, and the midnight is already blue so there is not need to mention violet skies (a bit of a colour clash too).
pink, orange, gold, amber.
Not bad but I have never seen midnight grey, and the midnight is already blue so there is not need to mention violet skies (a bit of a colour clash too).
replying on Ode to the Wolf by Cougarchic
9 Jan 2004, 1:40 PM
and that is not the last you will hear of lemurs.
replying on Halloween by ramtheman1
19 Oct 2003, 6:28 AM
Well if you will sit in a wheelchair all day, no wonder you are stiff.
on Halloween by ramtheman1
19 Oct 2003, 6:28 AM
I think the term 'Limerick' may have been copyrighted by someone else.
It is a verse where line 1,2,5 rhyme, and 3,4 rhyme.
It is a verse where line 1,2,5 rhyme, and 3,4 rhyme.
on September 11, 2001: That Day by blues361
19 Oct 2003, 6:26 AM
'that horrible day
Remembering all those innocent people lost
The U.S. staying strong'
Of course, had all the innocent lives lost resulted in America becoming a feeble shivering wreck, it might just have been worth it.
Remembering all those innocent people lost
The U.S. staying strong'
Of course, had all the innocent lives lost resulted in America becoming a feeble shivering wreck, it might just have been worth it.
replying on Blue Collar Beat by Big Daddy
17 Oct 2003, 8:21 AM
you become inspired to write like Big Daddy
replying on Faggots get what they deserve! by J.B. Manning
17 Oct 2003, 8:18 AM
Prefer my ass be sent to hell.
It is a persons spirit that goes to heaven, which I believe on earth resides somewhere in the neck (I think christians believe the spirit and therefore morality resides somewhere more phallic).
ps Is hell like some kind of gay bar then
It is a persons spirit that goes to heaven, which I believe on earth resides somewhere in the neck (I think christians believe the spirit and therefore morality resides somewhere more phallic).
ps Is hell like some kind of gay bar then
on Country music & handguns by <{Baba^Yaga}>
17 Oct 2003, 8:07 AM
More ironic if she was not true, and neither was the gun, you aiming the gun at youself and shooting her.
'I got a gun for my fist' (to replace my fist I read rather than to hold) is a cool line
'I got a gun for my fist' (to replace my fist I read rather than to hold) is a cool line
on laporoscopic library by FreeFormFixation
17 Oct 2003, 7:58 AM
cast a spell and gaping ears are a bit cliche.
Like the furrowed brow your borrowed frown is burrowing down wordplay
Like the furrowed brow your borrowed frown is burrowing down wordplay
on Night On the Town by razorgrin
17 Oct 2003, 7:56 AM
Nice wordplay 'limonade and I share white russian'
Beer that eats like a meal is a nice idea too
Beer that eats like a meal is a nice idea too
replying on Gilded Stumps of Olde (AN STORY THAT IS NOT AN POEME) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
10 Oct 2003, 12:24 AM
you may be semi-serious but you are a full time semi serious participant on this site.
All this crap about genius and cruelty, its true. I went to shake stephen hawkings hand the other day, bastard electricuted me ha haaaa ha
All this crap about genius and cruelty, its true. I went to shake stephen hawkings hand the other day, bastard electricuted me ha haaaa ha
on Parody Of Sadness by Miggy
9 Oct 2003, 2:19 PM
shades of john k, a fine parody
possibly should not have to tell the reader it is a parody
possibly should not have to tell the reader it is a parody
on Working man lament by Garrett S Sexton
9 Oct 2003, 2:15 PM
how sweet, life is shit she makes it (a bit) better
somehow chillingly reminiscent
the rhyme with sheep is a bit daft though
somehow chillingly reminiscent
the rhyme with sheep is a bit daft though
on B.F. by skaskowski
9 Oct 2003, 2:09 PM
Can't really hear it as a lyric,
nevertheless nice wordplay, and poetic language with something more concrete
nevertheless nice wordplay, and poetic language with something more concrete
on A Countercultural Trip by peaceseeker
9 Oct 2003, 12:13 PM
not bad, a little long winded, I think it tries to deal with the beat 'beat' in a too reflective way.
Good ideas about why the young condescend/ wisdom teeth/ dreads etc but needs to be snappier I think, maybe with a rhyme (just my personal preference).
Don't like the title though, it is a label
Good ideas about why the young condescend/ wisdom teeth/ dreads etc but needs to be snappier I think, maybe with a rhyme (just my personal preference).
Don't like the title though, it is a label