Re: Our world by 47Ronin	27-Jan-04/7:44 AM
there is a sound to irony, and this is not far off.
Re: Acrylic Sunrise by MacFrantic	9-Jan-04/1:43 PM
LSD?! pink, orange, gold, amber. Not bad but I have never seen midnight grey, and the midnight is already blue so there is not need to mention violet skies (a bit of a colour clash too).
Re: a comment on Ode to the Wolf by Cougarchic	9-Jan-04/1:40 PM
and that is not the last you will hear of lemurs.
Re: a comment on Halloween by ramtheman1	19-Oct-03/6:28 AM
Well if you will sit in a wheelchair all day, no wonder you are stiff.
Re: Halloween by ramtheman1	19-Oct-03/6:28 AM
I think the term 'Limerick' may have been copyrighted by someone else. It is a verse where line 1,2,5 rhyme, and 3,4 rhyme.
Re: September 11, 2001: That Day by blues361	19-Oct-03/6:26 AM
'that horrible day Remembering all those innocent people lost The U.S. staying strong' Of course, had all the innocent lives lost resulted in America becoming a feeble shivering wreck, it might just have been worth it.
Re: a comment on Blue Collar Beat by Big Daddy	17-Oct-03/8:21 AM
you become inspired to write like Big Daddy
Re: a comment on Faggots get what they deserve! by J.B. Manning	17-Oct-03/8:18 AM
Prefer my ass be sent to hell. It is a persons spirit that goes to heaven, which I believe on earth resides somewhere in the neck (I think christians believe the spirit and therefore morality resides somewhere more phallic). ps Is hell like some kind of gay bar then
Re: Country music & handguns by <{Baba^Yaga}>	17-Oct-03/8:07 AM
More ironic if she was not true, and neither was the gun, you aiming the gun at youself and shooting her. 'I got a gun for my fist' (to replace my fist I read rather than to hold) is a cool line
Re: laporoscopic library by FreeFormFixation	17-Oct-03/7:58 AM
cast a spell and gaping ears are a bit cliche. Like the furrowed brow your borrowed frown is burrowing down wordplay
Re: Night On the Town by razorgrin	17-Oct-03/7:56 AM
Nice wordplay 'limonade and I share white russian' Beer that eats like a meal is a nice idea too
Re: a comment on Reptilian by Christof	10-Oct-03/5:52 AM
and spelling
Re: a comment on Reptilian by Christof	10-Oct-03/5:51 AM
thanks christof, I will be thinking about strenthening some of my language.
Re: a comment on Gilded Stumps of Olde (AN STORY THAT IS NOT AN POEME) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	10-Oct-03/12:24 AM
you may be semi-serious but you are a full time semi serious participant on this site. All this crap about genius and cruelty, its true. I went to shake stephen hawkings hand the other day, bastard electricuted me ha haaaa ha
Re: a comment on Reptilian by Christof	9-Oct-03/2:21 PM
if you find time, you could look at one of mine. Poetand knowit says I am irredeemably crap and should look at yours, I can see they are good, but I can't see why mine are crap.
Re: Parody Of Sadness by Miggy	9-Oct-03/2:19 PM
shades of john k, a fine parody possibly should not have to tell the reader it is a parody
Re: Working man lament by Garrett S Sexton	9-Oct-03/2:15 PM
how sweet, life is shit she makes it (a bit) better somehow chillingly reminiscent the rhyme with sheep is a bit daft though
Re: B.F. by skaskowski	9-Oct-03/2:09 PM
Can't really hear it as a lyric, nevertheless nice wordplay, and poetic language with something more concrete
Re: Reptilian by Christof	9-Oct-03/12:16 PM
It may be just my poor reading of poetry, but is the and at the end of lines 2/3/4 necessary it seems to break up the flow.. 'my drinking remembers thirst' is my favourite line
Re: A Countercultural Trip by peaceseeker	9-Oct-03/12:13 PM
not bad, a little long winded, I think it tries to deal with the beat 'beat' in a too reflective way. Good ideas about why the young condescend/ wisdom teeth/ dreads etc but needs to be snappier I think, maybe with a rhyme (just my personal preference). Don't like the title though, it is a label