on Ode to the unwanted chip by deadstar
14 Nov 2002, 8:25 AM
oh, lord.
on The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus
14 Nov 2002, 8:17 AM
if i were Dannara, i wouldn't know how the hell to take this (not that i do anyway).
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
14 Nov 2002, 8:03 AM
don't be rude, or i'll spill my frothy beer in your lap!
i can't quite place this style. it's somewhere between jim morrison (yuk) and the surrealists (slightly less horrible). so impersonal, though, that's it's hard to connect with. reminds me of snorting ritalin and talking in circles and writing it down. those were the days.
on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
14 Nov 2002, 7:41 AM
i hate to say it (after all the other comments), but i like this poem. it's a little "exquisite corpse" and cold around the edges, but in its scatterbrained way, it's effective.
replying on Ten solid facts about -=Dark Angel=-, by his biggest palm frond, me. by horus8
6 Nov 2002, 8:50 AM
note the time.
replying on Hells Game by Katie
6 Nov 2002, 8:39 AM
i know i am.
on Drinker's Haikus 2a and 2b by cacophony
5 Nov 2002, 11:46 AM
i say once you hit 30, you're too old to drink that shit and should move on to scotch. sounds like your stomach's telling you the same thing. nice. 8
on Hells Game by Katie
5 Nov 2002, 11:31 AM
katie, in those same lines, you have two more "where"s to change to "were"s.
replying on untitled2 by PunchMeInTheFace
5 Nov 2002, 7:34 AM
you should shave your own moustache. it smells like beer.
replying on untitled2 by PunchMeInTheFace
5 Nov 2002, 7:25 AM
you're such a picky old biddy! about the poet though, best username ever.
replying on Ten solid facts about -=Dark Angel=-, by his biggest palm frond, me. by horus8
5 Nov 2002, 7:18 AM
you're one to talk!
replying on Wearing Black, as Memory Dictates by UnityMitford
5 Nov 2002, 7:14 AM
it's about Hitler. does that help?
on The Gunfighter by deadstar
5 Nov 2002, 7:13 AM
if you've never seen the film "The Gunfighter," you should, then revisit this poem. nothing wrong with the poem, but it could be a little tighter.
replying on Hells Game by Katie
5 Nov 2002, 7:10 AM
you're welcome, slim.
on Hells Game by Katie
5 Nov 2002, 6:55 AM
katie's back! there is some nice stuff in here. in the two "You thought you..." lines, you'll want to change the "where"s to "were"s. i like those lines, though. the poem veers from subtle to not so subtle, but it's one of your more solid poems (although what do i know).
on Ten solid facts about -=Dark Angel=-, by his biggest palm frond, me. by horus8
5 Nov 2002, 6:49 AM
what happened to old Gay Angel, anyhow? he hasn't been around. and i thought he said one time that he lived in Indiana.
replying on Wearing Black, as Memory Dictates by UnityMitford
4 Nov 2002, 1:50 PM
i'll think about it. although, why you'd want to strip the scent is beyond me.
replying on bad boy taylor by rosiebailey
4 Nov 2002, 1:48 PM
both of you, quiet! save your strength.