Re: Red by Brittanyy	21-Sep-03/9:12 PM
I love it, it has a certain melancholy ring of truth. 'It's so hard to see reality...' Yea, and you never really know what it's worth unless you've been on the other side of that fine line.Anyway, I enjoyed this one. 10.
Re: Fall by Brittanyy	21-Sep-03/9:17 PM
Hmmm. It's easy to get lost in this, the first time you read it. The second time it seems easier to understand. It must be painful, not knowing. Only one R in buried. 9.
Re: Little Girl by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/10:34 PM
I don't know what to think for sure. Why all the Cap's? I see where youre going but I don't follow.
Re: Leaving by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/10:37 PM
Damn. Well, still some problems,(spelling/typo's) That,s why you read it before you submit. Iliked it better then the other, so 8.
Re: An End to the Beginning by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/10:47 PM
You are still so young. Don't stress it. If it's not right, don't worry about it. Move on and don't look back.Life's too short to deal with assholes. Are you cute by the way? I'm a poet you know. Read some of mine. Tell me what you think. just click my name.
Re: Little Girl by Pervy Elf	24-Sep-03/10:55 PM
Capitol H Him. Do you mean God? I'm sure not, so why capitolize "him" ?The beginning of each line in a poem should be cap'd.
Re: Neophyte Bourgeoisie by EAger to Offend	24-Sep-03/11:21 PM
Yea, sometimes life is sweet, sometimes it's the extra's.(The deck, afternoon brunches, Lady McBeth?) Sometimes it's time alone.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Sep-03/10:36 PM
Um,hello. Of or relating to a category of poetry that expresses subjective thoughts and feelings, often in a songlike style or form. Not lyric?
Re: Insight by Moniquesuvee	27-Sep-03/8:03 AM
It sounds good though, I especially like it for the mechanic stuff. With a name like yours you don't seem like you'd be a mechanic. Good poet though.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Oct-03/9:44 PM
Not finished yet, but I figured I'd get your feel for it so far, new style and all. Pleeze be gentle, I,m soooo sensitive.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Oct-03/9:50 PM
well man I don't know what to think of your well thought out sarcastic interlude. If you truly are in a wheelchair(catheter and all) I should think you'd have spent your time better than this. Buuutt, you make me laugh. HA HA
Re: Why do you give yourself blue tens? by Bachus	2-Oct-03/8:46 PM
As are you with this. You know, someone likes giving bunches of those anonymous 0's also. Write one for those cowards.
Re: On the Occasion by tadpole	2-Oct-03/8:48 PM
You must be Native American.What Occasion may I ask?
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Oct-03/8:51 PM
Hmm, possibly your best so far? no, but close.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Oct-03/8:56 PM
It is a song. Take the verse about Grand-pa and build on it, I'd be interested in hearing that. Not that thas isn"t interesting, but I especially like that image. Talk about how it's bringing grandma down, etc.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Oct-03/8:59 PM
Verse 4, line 2, heeded? Leave my with a smile baby, I'll still love you in the morning.Especially after the poems you would be bound to write about the smile I put on you.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Oct-03/9:03 PM
Why do all of these have 3 ten's? Are you cheating? Hoar us wrote a haiku about that. Anyway on to the poem. What to say? Quit dating insensitive assholes who can't finish for starters. Still, a well written emotional vent.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Oct-03/9:09 PM
A nice piece to get lost in. And I do get lost, simple minded as I am. If you read any more of mine you'll see what I mean, just click my name. But back to this one,I think you must study Ancient Greece and the Bible, I see them both here somehow. I like it I shall bestow a meritorious 10.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Oct-03/9:16 PM
I think you may be exactly what these pimple faced baboons need. Oh to breath the fresh scented air of a new style. (Plus I saw your picture, and DAMN.)Read a few more of mine and speak freely, please. Well done with this.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Oct-03/9:22 PM
It's funny that you would use "Sliver of reality",Then talk about my purpose in life. Few and far between are we, but I am certain that will change, just like the weather, may a new season come.