on I Think by PawnedTidal
22 Sep 2002, 6:47 PM
Nice. Clean. Too surfacy though, you dipped well with the angel/amiss. Go deeper.
on some deleted poem
22 Sep 2002, 6:53 PM
Last line seems to be going in it's own direction,but there's a very thin connection. I think differently about people who hve given themselves to god though.WOW!
on Lysander cried by bornagainpoet
22 Sep 2002, 6:57 PM
I like simplicity, could be modified to rhyme without losing it's intent. Good stuff!
on The End OF Me by Birdman42s
22 Sep 2002, 7:00 PM
If at first you don't succeed...
Iron it out, otherwise it works.
Iron it out, otherwise it works.
on Ex In Bonds by OneFingerAnswer
22 Sep 2002, 7:04 PM
Nice rhyme! Almost fooled me with the title, or did you? Next time, turn it up!
on some deleted poem
22 Sep 2002, 7:10 PM
Sorry,didn't mean to offend. Missed
the literal. Does my rookieness show?
the literal. Does my rookieness show?
on some deleted poem
22 Sep 2002, 8:04 PM
I read an article in mens' health that told men what woemen expected on a date, written by a woman. I thought why would women help men take advantage of them .Then I thought to write about that but you beat me to it. And simplified it too! It doesn't get any better. 10
on Faded by aperfecttool77
23 Sep 2002, 5:17 AM
Awareness is important, action is more. Good product. Go deeper!
on Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore
23 Sep 2002, 5:24 AM
Good stuff! Tree sap color? A girls broken heart? I like poems that lend themselves to 2 way thoughts. 8
on When The Iron Curtain Came Down by RoseEyes
23 Sep 2002, 5:33 AM
The"walls" went up late, then came down quickly.First group seems a little off. Easy to read,liked it.7
on .:|bittersweet|:. by emman
23 Sep 2002, 5:38 AM
This has a subtle power,and 3 idea possibilities.Alittle ironing, simplification and BOOM! it's there. 8
on suffer the child by edge
23 Sep 2002, 5:43 AM
Oh how I hate pain and suffering. However as a lyric this does fly pretty easily. Can't think......8
on Punishment and Punishment again by vulcan
23 Sep 2002, 5:49 AM
Sooooooo much with sooooo little.
This is artful!!!!!! 9
This is artful!!!!!! 9
on Me and She. by peach835
23 Sep 2002, 5:52 AM
Circ-ular! Love it! Fun! Poignant too.8
on some deleted poem
23 Sep 2002, 2:40 PM
SCHMOOOOVE! I don't think this needs anything 'cept a glass of water maybe.9
on some deleted poem
23 Sep 2002, 2:43 PM
OY! I don'tknow which way to go with this piece.Understanding fails me but, that's me not you.9
on Universal Musings by blu143
23 Sep 2002, 2:51 PM
Trim this by the first fifty-percent and let it fly.7
on untitled by ThreeFourSix
23 Sep 2002, 2:54 PM
I hate it when they don't listen! 7 his could use more and not hurt it.