| Re: Put Down by SpiffyDoo |
28-Sep-02/3:39 PM |
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| Re: The Seagull Reader by SpiffyDoo |
28-Sep-02/3:43 PM |
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Of the three, this is the better I think. I think you can improve with future pieces. Welcome.9
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28-Sep-02/3:46 PM |
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This seems like practice in rythm or patterns, little else. Did you let the hammer fall or what,D.A?
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28-Sep-02/3:48 PM |
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Buy a heated blanket and forget about 'im!!! Nice work ma'am.9
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| Re: I'll Always Remember by NobodyGirl9 |
28-Sep-02/3:53 PM |
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Shorten and add a little beef.Good rythm.8
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| Re: A Sign on a Giant Donut at a Twenty Four Hour a Day Donut Shop Overlooking Pacific Coast Highway in Sunset Beach California at Eight in the Evening on September Twenty Fourth Two-Thousand and Two by Dark Angle |
28-Sep-02/3:56 PM |
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AAW CHRIST! THATS FUNNY. I remember I was at a 7-11 in Colo and this lady was putting her daughter in the car when the little on held up a pack of Dolly Madisons and yelled DONUTS!
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28-Sep-02/7:55 PM |
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No, but this is the lowest i've scored any one since I've been here.
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| Re: Suicide III by disturbedone182 |
29-Sep-02/8:37 AM |
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I've seen a suicide. Guy shot himself with a .22 handgun. It's nothing more than sad and selfish. We owe you no apology either. BUT there's a rythm.2
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| Re: Paysage Moralise by vulcan |
29-Sep-02/8:43 AM |
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I really like this.9 Iwish I understood (latin) the title.
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| Re: Gemini by susie |
29-Sep-02/8:46 AM |
My mom was a Gem. An alcoholic too.
This makes me smile and scares the bejeeezus out of me too. Kudos.8
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29-Sep-02/8:48 AM |
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I'm not the best at rcognizing patterns but I think this needa just a little tweaking. Try shifing some lines around.7
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| Re: Paysage Moralise by vulcan |
29-Sep-02/4:09 PM |
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Sorry I assumed latin. What a dumb-fuck eh?
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| Re: Cheap Thrills by Owner of the Sky |
29-Sep-02/4:17 PM |
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| Re: the room's a'spinnin' by nentwined |
30-Sep-02/5:44 PM |
OK, so you're not a kung fu master.
Or a haiku master for that matter.But, it's fun, take a friggin' nap will ya! And thanks for leaving my dumb ass on the site.You knew I'd be back didntcha?
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30-Sep-02/5:49 PM |
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Sweeet. Thats perfect as far as I'm concerned.
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| Re: At The Sloane Slattery on Saturday by Limness |
30-Sep-02/6:41 PM |
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WOO HOO!!! Another motorhead! I prefer mine with four wheels but since I've moved from the Mile High to WI, I can really dig that cool Harley vibe. Ride on!!!!
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| Re: Asthma by jessicazee |
30-Sep-02/6:52 PM |
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This has potential. Focus more on the breathing aspects and less on other junk. No score. work it.
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| Re: always the end to this good night by nentwined |
30-Sep-02/6:55 PM |
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Seriously, what's up with the sleep dep. dude. Dudette?
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30-Sep-02/7:06 PM |
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Of the four , this falls pretty flat. The other three are decent and I think you have talent. This is a tough crowd. Show us.
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| Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof |
1-Oct-02/5:57 AM |
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That is beautiful. A tear has fallen. Scale not big enough.
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