on Put Down by SpiffyDoo
28 Sep 2002, 3:39 PM
Spooky. 8
on The Seagull Reader by SpiffyDoo
28 Sep 2002, 3:43 PM
Of the three, this is the better I think. I think you can improve with future pieces. Welcome.9
on some deleted poem
28 Sep 2002, 3:46 PM
This seems like practice in rythm or patterns, little else. Did you let the hammer fall or what,D.A?
on some deleted poem
28 Sep 2002, 3:48 PM
Buy a heated blanket and forget about 'im!!! Nice work ma'am.9
on I'll Always Remember by NobodyGirl9
28 Sep 2002, 3:53 PM
Shorten and add a little beef.Good rythm.8
on A Sign on a Giant Donut at a Twenty Four Hour a Day Donut Shop Overlooking Pacific Coast Highway in Sunset Beach California at Eight in the Evening on September Twenty Fourth Two-Thousand and Two by Dark Angle
28 Sep 2002, 3:56 PM
AAW CHRIST! THATS FUNNY. I remember I was at a 7-11 in Colo and this lady was putting her daughter in the car when the little on held up a pack of Dolly Madisons and yelled DONUTS!
on some deleted poem
28 Sep 2002, 7:55 PM
No, but this is the lowest i've scored any one since I've been here.
on Suicide III by disturbedone182
29 Sep 2002, 8:37 AM
I've seen a suicide. Guy shot himself with a .22 handgun. It's nothing more than sad and selfish. We owe you no apology either. BUT there's a rythm.2
on Paysage Moralise by vulcan
29 Sep 2002, 8:43 AM
I really like this.9 Iwish I understood (latin) the title.
on some deleted poem
29 Sep 2002, 8:48 AM
I'm not the best at rcognizing patterns but I think this needa just a little tweaking. Try shifing some lines around.7
on Paysage Moralise by vulcan
29 Sep 2002, 4:09 PM
Sorry I assumed latin. What a dumb-fuck eh?
on Cheap Thrills by Owner of the Sky
29 Sep 2002, 4:17 PM
Poingnant,scary,funny.8
on the room's a'spinnin' by nentwined
30 Sep 2002, 5:44 PM
OK, so you're not a kung fu master.
Or a haiku master for that matter.But, it's fun, take a friggin' nap will ya! And thanks for leaving my dumb ass on the site.You knew I'd be back didntcha?
Or a haiku master for that matter.But, it's fun, take a friggin' nap will ya! And thanks for leaving my dumb ass on the site.You knew I'd be back didntcha?
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 5:49 PM
Sweeet. Thats perfect as far as I'm concerned.
on At The Sloane Slattery on Saturday by Limness
30 Sep 2002, 6:41 PM
WOO HOO!!! Another motorhead! I prefer mine with four wheels but since I've moved from the Mile High to WI, I can really dig that cool Harley vibe. Ride on!!!!
on Asthma by jessicazee
30 Sep 2002, 6:52 PM
This has potential. Focus more on the breathing aspects and less on other junk. No score. work it.
on always the end to this good night by nentwined
30 Sep 2002, 6:55 PM
Seriously, what's up with the sleep dep. dude. Dudette?
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 7:06 PM
Of the four , this falls pretty flat. The other three are decent and I think you have talent. This is a tough crowd. Show us.
on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
1 Oct 2002, 5:57 AM
That is beautiful. A tear has fallen. Scale not big enough.