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At The Sloane Slattery on Saturday

by Limness

Member since 2002 · Posted 29 Sep 2002 · Edited 30 Sep 2002 · 18 comments

Antique tools and ancient engines Harleys lined up next to Indians Driven there, and carted in Used and loved, for sale again. Vendors selling well-worn parts Steam machines with iron hearts Long, loose belts and heavy wheels: Popping, firing, belching, steel Turn and grind and dig and plow As they have for centuries now. And to eat, there's steam-cooked soup Corn-on-the-cob, and burgers too. The city folk laughed, manning the booth, At me for wanting my ear uncooked But I smiled and paid the man Went around back, shucked it and Ate it raw, silk and all. The air is cool, the sun is hot, In between seasons, and time's forgot The span between back then and now With a crowd just milling around Gawking at the boothed displays: New England on a Saturday

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[8] knickytoy 30-Sep-02/9:19 AM Reply
Sounds fun to me! Especially the belching!
[n/a] Limness › knickytoy 30-Sep-02/9:27 AM Reply
okay Toby, i changed the ending.
[8] knickytoy › Limness 30-Sep-02/10:09 AM Reply
I like that better. And I love booth-ed. What part of grammar is that?
[n/a] Limness › knickytoy 30-Sep-02/11:50 AM Reply
adj, madge
[8] knickytoy › Limness 30-Sep-02/1:08 PM Reply
I know it's an adj! But isn't there a specific name for a verb turned adj? As in "That fucking asshole".
[n/a] poetandknowit 30-Sep-02/11:55 AM Reply
"The air is cool, the sun is hot,
In between seasons, and time's forgot"

I do not like this, no I do not, I do not like this I think it flops. I guess I want more from the ending. If it was as good as the first stanza, you would have it. I am not going to vote until you quit stopping off at the bar before coming home.
[n/a] Limness › poetandknowit 30-Sep-02/11:58 AM Reply
who said anything about stopping off? the cooler's in the trunk, babycakes.

the sun is very hot, after all.
and yes, it does suck. but at least it's there to be ridiculed until i can finish it right proper. when it is iced, i shall alert the media.
[n/a] poetandknowit › Limness 30-Sep-02/12:00 PM Reply
I never said it sucked, I said it flops. And you better not be drinking and driving. It is against the law.
[n/a] Limness › poetandknowit 30-Sep-02/12:06 PM Reply
but, to me, it sucks. i will fix it, if i ever recover from that nasty muse bite i got last night. (it is not up to my standards.)
[7] god'swife 30-Sep-02/2:00 PM Reply
Belching is mis-spelled.
[n/a] Limness › god'swife 30-Sep-02/2:04 PM Reply
thank you. i fixed it.
[n/a] Frass › Limness 30-Sep-02/2:14 PM Reply
I like this poem, Lmns, good luck with tightening it up. I saw the new Harley V Rod up close, yesterday. That's a hot looking motorbike; but, I'd swap out the solid alum. wheels for spokes.
[n/a] poetandknowit › Frass 30-Sep-02/2:36 PM Reply
What, you use a motor to get up them there humps in Virginia. And here I thought you were the spawn of John Tomac. Geez. What is the use of CPR.
[7] god'swife 30-Sep-02/2:18 PM Reply
Nice rythmn, and images. S3 is very endearing. What's a Slattery?
[n/a] Limness › god'swife 30-Sep-02/3:35 PM Reply
Slaone and Slattery were people. It's a museum/homestead in Kent, CT. and this weekend was the harvest festival/antique tool and machinery show. I bought a double-ended crescent wrench witha fancy square-cut center, some raw amber to make jewelry with, and a better sey of needle files. and 2 ears of raw corn, despite being called crazy at high volume several times (in a very good-spirited way, of course).
[n/a] poetandknowit › Limness 30-Sep-02/3:46 PM Reply
Sitting at DIA with a flight delay and now I am totally turned on. I bet you could kick my ass.
[n/a] <~> › poetandknowit 30-Sep-02/3:51 PM Reply
and i bet you'd want more when she was done.
[8] INTRANSIT 30-Sep-02/6:41 PM Reply
WOO HOO!!! Another motorhead! I prefer mine with four wheels but since I've moved from the Mile High to WI, I can really dig that cool Harley vibe. Ride on!!!!