Re: Kelly Clarkson's Lament by bondjedi	27-Sep-02/4:41 AM
I read your dossier, and looked at your previous work. You have an uncanny knack for this. You've done better. I think.
Re: RunOnSentence by harrytuttle	27-Sep-02/5:24 AM
Damn, forgot the "other" box. Sorry dude.
Re: The Good Old Days in New Orleans by cobalt	27-Sep-02/5:14 PM
I was thinking more a long the lines of living people. Refrencing spirits or mood. Either way it works.9
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Sep-02/5:55 PM
This ones too deep for me. Maybe it's a girl thing, this one.Good though8
Re: Colony by <{Baba^Yaga}>	27-Sep-02/5:57 PM
OUCH! But you are right.9
Re: Char by Amelia	27-Sep-02/6:13 PM
Really neat idea!!!!! Makes my LONLY look like fecal matter.(which it is)
Re: Never get it right by Mutant_X	27-Sep-02/6:20 PM
Both pieces need less telling and more showing. Recommendation: Find poetry that you like and read as much as you can. You'll develop a better feel for the written word.7
Re: Unpleasant Morning by liljsmith87	27-Sep-02/6:25 PM
Check this out!!! Find "Mother goose" at the library. You're looking for "a crooked sixpence" It was my favorite when I was little.I'm 35 and still can repeat it from memory. That was fun.7
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Sep-02/6:31 PM
patience grasshopper. must walk before run. too much sugar make for muscle spasm and bad headache.good that you try. try again.6
Re: I Wish by liljsmith87	27-Sep-02/6:34 PM
Not unheard of. Takes effort on both parts. Work on your descriptiveness. Good though.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Sep-02/6:38 PM
S-4 Is strongest I think. Your dossier tells me you can do better.
Re: Witch to Wicca by Lenore	27-Sep-02/6:47 PM
I'm sorry I can't comment. Your level is above mine. Ienjoy reading your work though.
Re: storm by unknown	27-Sep-02/6:49 PM
Simple. Powerful. Haiku.9
Re: Hunter's Moon by Rex Karrs	27-Sep-02/6:54 PM
Can't touch this...too good for my feeble mind.9
Re: Hunter's Moon by Rex Karrs	28-Sep-02/10:16 AM
FRASS, Thanks for the vote of confidence.My inferiority complex got the better of me last night.Can't wait for sun6p! I'm trying to (hang). Maybe trying too hard. Another glitch. Time, time is on my side.......
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Sep-02/10:25 AM
"and feeling stronger" sets a speed bump for me. Otherwise Its been a long time since I've looked at a mannequin that way . Loved "upskirting" the stiff broads.8
Re: Char by Amelia	28-Sep-02/10:32 AM
Even better the second time around.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Sep-02/3:24 PM
Are you really writing a story? These are great charachter names if you are. This is relaxed. Nice.8
Re: Suburban Horror by phbiscuit	28-Sep-02/3:29 PM
Where can I get some of that new dismal you've patented. This goes many different ways.Sickly truthful. 8
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Sep-02/3:32 PM
I'm feeling war-ish.Good piece. Jagged, in a good way.8