| Re: I smell coffee by Princess_Snowflake |
10-Jan-04/8:00 AM |
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| Re: Malaysia by Crakyamuni |
11-Jan-04/7:16 AM |
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The only thing I'd change is belly button. too silly for a serious piece. And generally speaking, hacks have no idea what assonance and alliteration are. Now tuck, Nip.
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| Re: A feast for a king by fair12 |
11-Jan-04/7:23 AM |
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"crying their history in the orbs of my eyes" Orbs bugs me. It's like saying the eyes of my eyes. Easy fix.
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| Re: Da Ghetto by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
11-Jan-04/12:09 PM |
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Yes. I feel better already.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
11-Jan-04/1:03 PM |
Out of 02 stuff? Good time to get bold would be my guess. as if my freight train could be considered bold. ha!
This looks like villanelle material to me.
How about a self censored (pose)-the frozen mouse.
I mess with legos. I decided to make a forward-engined spacecraft. I had never seen one, excepting the pod-racers of course. I'm rather happy I decided to go "wierd".
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| Re: lemuridae by richa |
11-Jan-04/1:05 PM |
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This comes across more poetically than pokingly.
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| Re: A dream of a fruit-gun by zodiac |
11-Jan-04/2:36 PM |
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| Re: Mermaid by lastobelus |
11-Jan-04/2:48 PM |
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People like you and middenHeap show up, and I feel flat out stepped on. *races toward liquor cabinet*
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| Re: Cherry Blossoms (anti-haiku) by middenHeap |
11-Jan-04/2:49 PM |
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This is not your average sunday night on the 'ranker.
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| Re: A dream of a fruit-gun by zodiac |
11-Jan-04/6:52 PM |
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Get the hell outta here Zodiac! No. Nevermind. I'll show myself the door. Thank you.
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| Re: Lynched by Bachus |
12-Jan-04/5:48 PM |
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They say they-"aint skeered". they should be.
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| Re: Panda meat by horus8 |
12-Jan-04/5:53 PM |
see? SEE? I'M HARMLESS COMPARED TO THAT GUY!!!! I ONLY HAUL CARS!!! ONLY 10 AT A TIME TOO!! THEY'RE NOT NEAR AS BAD AS THAT SCENARIO IS! YEAH!!
harmless, I say.
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| Re: American Eden v.2 [revised] by SupremeDreamer |
12-Jan-04/5:57 PM |
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Definitely a wee bit-o-passion in this one.
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| Re: Kenny G by Everyone |
12-Jan-04/6:00 PM |
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and all this time I thought you were only a perverted school marm.10 for the boating thing.
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| Re: Spunkorpumpernipple by Shardik |
12-Jan-04/6:10 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Jan-04/10:07 AM |
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pure science indeed. miss you, btw.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Jan-04/10:11 AM |
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Suspicion of who's making money on said plant and admiring the beauty of plant through the window of a greenhouse.
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14-Jan-04/6:43 PM |
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bean? seems a little humorous for this. intended?
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| Re: The woods house by zodiac |
15-Jan-04/5:51 AM |
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smokin' good. I don't think you need breaks at all. Look up poetandknowit and compare. Unless you are he.
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| Re: Skull Soup v.2 by SupremeDreamer |
15-Jan-04/5:58 AM |
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I like the title. why is the say nothing in quotes? Has it been said before? damn. that's a really good direction to take this poem. sprinkling it with the poetic theory. love the closure.
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