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A dream of a fruit-gun

Member since 2004 · Posted 11 Jan 2004 · 9 comments

You had a fruit gun I saw, and thought you'd got it the usual way: From night-classes, or the NRA – There's licensure for these things. And try As I might, you'd sight somewhere among the passers-by – I could not stop you – and shoot one, A boy, a man in a suit, one Tired housewife with her box of lye: It didn't matter To you in your school bell-tower, Ambusher of naiveté – Oh, you were a cute one, Laughing over its clatter-clatter With your laugh that seemed like a cry, Not shooting banana or even papay- A, though that might have at least made sense: We could all use more potassium, zinc, iron. But you'd found a Forbidden Fruit-gun, And at your feet, as on display, The dark, pulp-rotting fruit, dense And sweet, purple-grey Where long-ago bites had taken a piece away – Shoot one, and watch them scatter. From their sin – you, mad as a hatter And none of your headlong victims were as tense, None thought you more a brute – none Wished more for the screaming peace of a siren Than I. But what could I say? Come off it, sad tyrant? Lay your black vengeance aside – let it be you and I, And if we should die Alone in this, let it be nothing of consequence – You, with your Whitman, your Bible, your Byron At your poor defense. You, clutching your fruit-gun, Know that we have no more certainty than they And are as much a product our environs.

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[6] <{Baba^Yaga}> 11-Jan-04/2:24 PM Reply
Let me guess? this is in 'other' because your poetry is daring! Your fruit gun metaphor for a cock sandwich with a side of date rape brisque was riveting.
[10] INTRANSIT 11-Jan-04/2:36 PM Reply
I wrote about a train.
[n/a] zodiac 11-Jan-04/2:46 PM Reply
To Baba:
Man! a Ginsberg fan! I wasn't even thinking of cock sandwiches, but I guess it works for a poem about a Ginsberg fan. Truthfully, I was going to call it a "pimple" just for fun, but the OED didn't have a definition.
[6] <{Baba^Yaga}> › zodiac 11-Jan-04/3:28 PM Reply
I like it. it's actually well written. Maybe, I'm jealous?
[n/a] zodiac › <{Baba^Yaga}> 15-Jan-04/7:00 PM Reply
Don't be. You've got much better stuff here.
[10] INTRANSIT 11-Jan-04/6:52 PM Reply
Get the hell outta here Zodiac! No. Nevermind. I'll show myself the door. Thank you.
[n/a] zodiac 11-Jan-04/7:41 PM Reply
to INTRANSIT: No offense intended?
[n/a] Bachus › zodiac 12-Jan-04/11:49 AM Reply
to Jesus: Have you seen my goat? he answers to the name of Cashoe?
[n/a] zodiac › Bachus 15-Jan-04/6:59 PM Reply
No, but I saw your pigs. Ran 'em into the sea. -Jesus