look up: more than i bargained for.

Do you think/feel it is somehow your duty to guide those who follow your work? Picked up O.B. o A. P.
Spot on, as usual.

Waitresses
should come with
visometers
to tell customers their
sizzling fruit platters
have been ogled
enough
to prevent
dirty looks.

And when it happens in a public facility?

I wish I had more time.

Narrow space between the fog and the ground. Just right for crawling.

concerned. intersting. not sure i like it but it's better than the first time 'round

I think you would do better to lose any rhyme here, even accidental. Good to see ya.

I'm changing my name to: Man who speaks like Fire Engine. whaddaya think? i got nuthin.

Yet it is not mentioned in the Bible. Hmmm.

Here. Let me douse this "poem" with the only score that actually befits such a pompous fog.1

I don't like *trippy* and the first two lines of the last stanza go pimply try to change the why/fly.

The rest, unlike me, is ace.

Compare this to the one you have on the best list. You used an image there. There are no images here. It's all telling and no showing. Find an image. Stay away from stone and God. Too cliche. Use the brown cloud as a kind of hazy security blanket. Or something else. look around. Possibility is everywhere. Try again, I know you can do this. The next time you make the top, it won't be an accident. Keep reading too.

XOI

feel free to backhand me for being the dim I am.
Dic.com says one n for inamorato. 10 for teaching me latin.

Too bad neither one of us is bad enough to grace the worst list ,eh?

"Poetry is a search for syllables to shoot at the barriers of the known and the unknowable."

Carl Sandburg

I like this but it's too thin like weak iced tea.

I'd like to see the rythm a bit smoother. I like this.

Tyrranosaurus Rex gobbles a million mex.

and that's when Tina screamed "IKE!"

"and god goes not at all with wine" ace.