| Re: fashion sense by crin |
30-Jul-02/8:01 PM |
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This could have been better stated in pa-riz-oze. 7 for effort.
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| Re: Crying Beside a Lake by x311 |
30-Jul-02/7:50 PM |
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While I'm sure you found this cathartic, those of us considerate enough to read the damned thing are stupider for having done so and I hardly think that's fair.
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| Re: domination by midnight |
29-Jul-02/10:01 PM |
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WHAT ISN'T MANLY ABOUT PINK
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| Re: A prayer for the afterthought by Eric Johnson |
29-Jul-02/9:58 PM |
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10 for sincerity and craft, -1 because it isn't terribly novel, overall quite good. Genuine sentiment of this sort is very rare here.
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| Re: wednesday night after church by unknown |
29-Jul-02/9:57 PM |
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and little boys, am I right?
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| Re: Assassin's Song by Tekara |
29-Jul-02/9:56 PM |
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You have obviously never killed anyone.
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| Re: Crimson Diaries by Jsylum |
29-Jul-02/9:55 PM |
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precious, not too pretty...hmm...hard decision..pretty good....quite a cut above...yet it doesn't do much for me. Perhaps I should write a poem about how I feel.
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| Re: The End by venusdemilo |
29-Jul-02/9:54 PM |
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| Re: Seasonal Memories by ErgoErgun |
29-Jul-02/9:52 PM |
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As a former Steat Urchin and Art Student I am in a position to tell you that never have Neitzsche, Bacardi, placard and "hot summer waltzes" ever been combined in any medium. I am giving you a ten because the "rape teacher" poem really gives me perspective on this one.
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| Re: untitled #3 by venusdemilo |
29-Jul-02/9:39 PM |
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| Re: Economics 499 by ErgoErgun |
29-Jul-02/9:30 PM |
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Not very poetic, but quite good all the same.
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| Re: I Hate You by mytenderrage |
29-Jul-02/9:26 PM |
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P.S.: DarkAngel hates you./ DarkAngel hates you./ DarkAngel hates you because he loves you. Furthermore, DA AND RAVEN SITTIN' IN A TREE, KAY EYE ESS ESS EYE EN GEE. FIRST COMES LOVE, THEN COMES MARRAIGE, THEN COMES A DEMENTED BABY WITH BAD TEETH AND BAD LUCK WITH THE OPPOSITE GENDER, NOT TO MENTION A PROPENSITY FOR THE ARGUING ARTS IN THE BABY CARRAIGE.
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| Re: I Hate You by mytenderrage |
29-Jul-02/9:15 PM |
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A LIGHTNING STORM?? DA are you MARTIN LUTHER or SOMETHING?? Now RAVEN, I would like to make it very clear that I DO NOT WANT YOUR "PUNANI". Don't worry about that. Nobody wants it, even if you gave it away. Now I personally think this poem is mediocre. It is certainly not deserving of 10s, but that's opinion. I was reading some Dylan Thomas last night, and I'd be a damn fool not to tell you to do the same. The major fault of this poem and all of its ilk is that it is meaningless by virtue of its medium. TCP/IP has a tendency to destroy any significance to the words you're saying. TCP/IP, even in the ARPANET days made it painfully clear how much utter bullshit floats above us like those plant islands on venus in that episode of cowboy bebop. So in short, I suggest you TOSS OUT THE DEAD CAN DANCE CDs, START LISTENING TO JOY DIVISION AND GET SOME LIKEMINDED PEOPLE TOGETHER WITH SOME WHISKEY AND WRITE ABOUT THAT. Remember, WRITE what you KNOW, but do not SUBMIT IT if it IS UTTERLY LACKING IN CRAFT OR NOVELTY or ANYTHING ELSE WHICH I'D CARE TO READ. If you need some help I'm sure DA would be happy to critique your work before you hit submit.
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| Re: River of life by Roisin |
29-Jul-02/8:58 PM |
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| Re: untitled #2 by venusdemilo |
29-Jul-02/8:55 PM |
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I think M.J. already covered this material
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| Re: The Rocky-Horus picture show by horus8 |
29-Jul-02/8:54 PM |
YOU ARE A WANKER. PLEASE DELETE THIS POEM.
Why not just be satisfied with normal poetry like everybody else? Why strive for more?? AFTER ALL YOUR FATHER AND I HAVE DONE FOR YOU.
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| Re: will you? by Sapphire |
28-Jul-02/6:26 PM |
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Sorry, not enough...time?
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| Re: Hands by frostygirl |
28-Jul-02/6:22 PM |
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Look honey if it weren't for the gun and the spear we'd all be eating berries and morels right now
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| Re: The Pain by silver |
28-Jul-02/6:21 PM |
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| Re: Mellow by frostygirl |
28-Jul-02/6:17 PM |
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