on FISH by annadoc
28 Apr 2006, 4:18 PM
Thought I'd write a cinquain. Shouldn'ta posted, but I did. Why the venom (seething out)?
on A Taste of Rose by Richard
27 Apr 2006, 4:54 PM
I liked it, but there are a few lines I think could be stronger -- "too bad, but I think low tide has come"
"as this life is sadly tasteless" "Peace maybe forever this time: and I agree the topic has been done (one too many times)
"as this life is sadly tasteless" "Peace maybe forever this time: and I agree the topic has been done (one too many times)
on Goldmunds Slut Fiasco v.2 [Revised] by Y2kSlamPoet
25 Apr 2006, 4:51 PM
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on 99% of the Time by TLRufener
25 Apr 2006, 4:38 PM
I really liked this poem. It reminds me of the fact that sometimes "I" can't think of all the things I "want" to stay and this was expressed so well.
replying on Sun's color by annadoc
21 Apr 2006, 5:11 PM
Thank you for giving me food for thought. I use to love the streaming sunlight (when I was young) coming in the window.
I would think about changing title to Sun (Play)?
I would think about changing title to Sun (Play)?
on Im different so what? by xblackstarsx
20 Apr 2006, 5:36 PM
looks like typos intentional. Childish (meant to be?)
I'll stop "now" - instead of no?
I'll stop "now" - instead of no?
replying on Lost and Found by annadoc
20 Apr 2006, 5:34 PM
I made some slight edits, but don't know if improved (or lessened). The piece is contradictory & confused - as the opposites trying to show we are both things, accept us as that, can we still feel inclusion (even though we are so different)-unsure if I communicated that sufficiently.
on Sarah's Song by wilco
19 Apr 2006, 2:33 PM
Contemplative. I liked it.
on A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus
19 Apr 2006, 2:29 PM
I thought the imagery was very good. I also noted the small edits needed such as (comma after again, before words "my love"), the blossom(s) fell like soft rain, and mis-spelled word incense. I thought this was one of the best poems I've read here.
on Misplaced Life by Richard
19 Apr 2006, 2:20 PM
I thought this poem had some depth to the verse. gave me pause.
replying on Story remains the same by annadoc
19 Apr 2006, 2:16 PM
thank you for the thoughts...what I truly need to improve ... and I've been reading others and have to compose my thoughts on those and give my feed back... and I feel I can get some useful inspiration --
I also thought this was a cliche (myself).
I also thought this was a cliche (myself).