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A Taste of Rose (Free verse) by Richard
Hued, red like the setting sun, fire-like. It's kiss a torture to my senses, ecstasy. Yearning for my next rush, desperate, I- Sit in my bungalow counting grains of sand. The food is bland at night, no spice- So I peel a petal from your rose, rest it, On my tongue, it's last vestige, Or hint of fragrance, gone. Just brown edges wilting more day by day. My once crimson blood has stained the stem, Brown, like the dead leaves of Autumn. My hands and fingers pierced, in remorse. Punishment maybe or just carelessness. Too bad but I think low tide has come, I can barely hear the waves, or your voice. They are somehow silent, now, in my head. Peace, maybe forever this time, my waiting- Done, as this life is sadly tasteless, Without you, I come...

Up the ladder: Portals to you
Down the ladder: 7th one about Jon

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5674
Posted: April 3, 2005 3:04 PM PDT; Last modified: April 3, 2005 3:04 PM PDT
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Comments:
[8] INTRANSIT @ 204.110.228.254 | 3-Apr-05/3:20 PM | Reply
I'll try to get back to this one, first read ...7.5
[8] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 4.224.24.70 | 3-Apr-05/7:01 PM | Reply
Roses are done to death, but this is well written. -8-
[7] annadoc @ 161.7.2.160 | 27-Apr-06/4:54 PM | Reply
I liked it, but there are a few lines I think could be stronger -- "too bad, but I think low tide has come"
"as this life is sadly tasteless" "Peace maybe forever this time: and I agree the topic has been done (one too many times)
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