Re: a comment on Mentally Disabled by drnick	16-Feb-06/1:57 PM
That may be true, but the real question is could she without using a three letter word with misplaced capitolization? I hope you don't think that this is my poem back to her...althought if you did, it would be hilarious that you rated it a ten just for the title.
Re: a comment on Mentally Disabled by drnick	15-Feb-06/10:24 PM
I wanted to write something that made very little sense. In part to show how easy it is(at least for me) to get caught up in literary devices and rhyming schemes and loose all meaning. The first line alludes to that(in music, some say you loose something in the transition from analog to digital). The other part, if it works right, is to show that if you look too closely at anything you'll find it more complex than it really is. The last two lines refer to that. When I wrote this I imagined that more intelligent people would be confused and angry over the nonsense it feeds you, while the "mentally disabled" would enjoy it for its simple pleasures. Jesus, I'm writing a novel about what this thing means...let me sum it up: This is here to fuck with you.
Re: A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	15-Feb-06/9:24 PM
This is really good! This might be my favorite poem I've read from you, and quite possibly your best. My only warning: do not get drunk with your power; that is what liquor is for.
Re: To drnick by amanda_dcosta	15-Feb-06/10:41 AM
I truely am honored that you would take your time to write such a kind piece of poetry, as this is, to a heathan like myself. I hope you understand that I will not rate this piece, due to undeniable bias. I will write a poem in responce to this, perhaps not directed to you...but more in explanation of myself. However, it was "His" plan for me to get really drunk alone last night...just like every year, and so I will have to wait until I am less hung-over. Thank you, again, for this =]
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	14-Feb-06/1:38 PM
I do like it, it's just hard for me to relate to. I hope that your poem, if written, would not be out of spite and if not, I would be truely honored; as with any poet, it's safe to say the number of poems we've written to others outweighs the number we receive. I also hope that you don't think you will change my mind, I need some hard evidence for that. I live my life morally, and appreciate religion's influence on that; it proves to be a good guideline for mankind. If I burn in hell for all I've done, then bring it on. Disco Inferno.
Re: Happy 40th Anniversary by Dovina	13-Feb-06/9:11 PM
I'd like to think so, but it seems as though you think otherwise. I like lines 1-3 and 10-13. nice.
Re: a comment on Twenty-Some Years and Five Countries Away by drnick	13-Feb-06/9:01 PM
If everyone thought like that, then an apology could no longer be used for manipulation. It would lose its meaning, as it seems you have. Happy Valetine's Day (insert sarcasm here).
Re: Valentine by zodiac	13-Feb-06/8:46 PM
This is so good I want you to sign the rights to the movie over to me right now. Me likey!
Re: A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	13-Feb-06/8:39 PM
Jesus-god Damn-christ. There is no fucking god, and I am empirical evidence of that. I am really beggining to tired of this religious propoganda. BUT, I refuse to judge this solely on my beliefs and how nonsensical I find your's to be, so... it's actually good. definately go with zodiac's form and you will have a masterpiece.
Re: A Soldiers Story by Glasseyez	13-Feb-06/8:29 PM
Simple, but so are those who concieve war. I can dig it.
Re: a comment on a waste of time by hendrimike	13-Feb-06/8:23 PM
hahaha
Re: a waste of time by hendrimike	13-Feb-06/8:23 PM
I agree with what everyone said: you didn't really make a profound statement here. Yet, I still enjoyed this, there are some good lines: i went to get educated what i got was self pulsated on rooftops with a city view margueritas, beers, and guitars I'm not sure how you could improve this without completely reworking it.
Re: Twenty-Some Years and Five Countries Away by drnick	13-Feb-06/8:17 PM
Well...I didn't spend more time on this one, however I think it's still better than what I've been doing.
Re: Static by wilco	9-Feb-06/10:00 PM
This makes me salivate it's so good. I'd like to point out what I really like about this, but it would be every single line. I try very hard not to give out 10s, but this is perfect. "And the best radio station in town is nothing but static And the heartbreaking hum of the road is soft and erratic." -genius.
Re: Do Something by Miggy	9-Feb-06/9:55 PM
Hey, I think you might be getting it...this could be a lot better, but the SUBJECT is a massive improvement. Thus I will give you a 5.
Re: Dear Dad, Dear Mom, Dear Me by Miggy	9-Feb-06/9:49 PM
Wow...this is really bad. Come on, man, I know you're better than this. These sound like country-pop lyrics, and that music is for the musically retarded. Try to not be so obvious with what you're talking about, or say something profound if you do want to be direct.
Re: Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick	9-Feb-06/8:28 PM
I've begun to notice that everyone else on here puts a lot more time and effort into their poems than I do(I usually spend an hour/poem), and I don't think it's fair to ask your advice on something I haven't really worked on myself. The stuff I write is just crap, I mean take this poem: how pathetic is my imagry...did you even know I was attemping to have some imagry?-It's that bad. You guys all write some amazing poetry, and I'm sorry for asking you all to do my work for me. I will now pledge to work harder on my writing, although I have little time with classes, so that I can produce work that is of substance. I thank you all for being so kind and generous with your advice.
Re: a comment on Lonely Road by drnick	9-Feb-06/8:27 PM
I completely agree, there's nothing special about this poem...I've begun to notice that everyone else on here puts a lot more time into their poems than I do(I usually spend an hour), and I don't think it's fair to ask your advice on something I haven't really worked on myself. The stuff I write is just crap, I mean take this poem: how pathetic is my imagry...did you even know I was attemping to have some imagry?-It's that bad. You guys all write some amazing poetry, and I'm sorry for asking you all to do my work for me. I will now pledge to work harder on my writing, although I have little time with classes, so that I can produce work that is of substance. I thank you all for being so kind and generous with your advice. I will post this message on my latest piece of shit so that the people I'm talking to are more likely to read it.
Re: a comment on Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick	9-Feb-06/8:13 PM
Yes, that is part of what I am saying. I take it a bit further, though, and say if all our wishes were made reality we'd find existance boring and intolerable.
Re: My Father’s World by Dovina	9-Feb-06/12:33 PM
Pretty good, I'm not too crazy about lines 7 and 8. They seem too simple compared to everything else. What is with all the religious poems?