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Twenty-Some Years and Five Countries Away (Free verse) by drnick
It would seem as though an apology is in order, but for an apology there must also be regret. Alas, there be none of that; you lifted my heart in the same way a fossil is removed from its grave. Perhaps you fondled it in an inappropriate way, but at least you put it back from where it came. And so it lay waiting for another to come and mistake it for rare treasure. Your fingerprints still remain however forgotten they may be. It would seem as though a goodbye is in order, but for a goodbye you must be present. Alas, there be none of that; you came and left like the winds change-and with less evidence. The cozy summer's breeze is soon forgotten to the painful winter's gust. So here's to the thought of knowing you again, Twenty-some years and five countries away. Here's to the thought that you won’t be so beautiful and cold as you are today.

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Overall Rank: 3564
Posted: February 13, 2006 8:15 PM PST; Last modified: February 13, 2006 8:15 PM PST
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[n/a] drnick @ 24.176.22.254 | 13-Feb-06/8:17 PM | Reply
Well...I didn't spend more time on this one, however I think it's still better than what I've been doing.
[4] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 | 13-Feb-06/8:35 PM | Reply
For appoalog, there need not be regret. In fact, regret is a bad reason for appology. Appology should be used for manipulation. Some people, and I'll mention no poemranker usernames, fail to apply it where advantage could attend its use.
[n/a] drnick @ 24.176.22.254 > Dovina | 13-Feb-06/9:01 PM | Reply
If everyone thought like that, then an apology could no longer be used for manipulation. It would lose its meaning, as it seems you have. Happy Valetine's Day (insert sarcasm here).
[4] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 > drnick | 13-Feb-06/9:06 PM | Reply
No sarcasm intneded, no bitterness either. Remorce should not lead to appology unless the appology serves a useful purpose. I have appologized when I had no remorse, when I thought I was entirely right.
[9] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 14-Feb-06/2:18 AM | Reply
For genuine apology there ought to be regret, not that I need to apologise for anything here because I love this poem.
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