poemranker ::i hung that page to dry by FreeFormFixation

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Free verse № 132479

i hung that page to dry

Member since 2003 · Posted 25 Oct 2005 · 4 comments

i set said paintbrush to the easel of my flesh and let the flecks of paint speak for the spoken silence in a senseless reverie. and let the silver strands of moonlight dance upon my naked breast as the curtains fell like fireworks fall to the floor as ash. i hung the photograph to dry within the round red room and turned the faucet on to mask the sound of vomiting beyond the door. I rubbed my fingers down the sides of the moist and frigid toilet bowl as the faucet bent like wires bend and sag when meat is hung from them. i scraped off all the wallpaper with shredded fingernails and littered marble and linoleum with shaving-blood drop trails. til all they heard from me was silence like a silent willow tree. as the curtains climbed like fireworks climb through decaying leaves. i hung that page to dry.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 6.17 weighted 5.31 rank 3558 views 225 View voting details →

6 votes so far. Yours would make 7.6 votes so far

4 comments

[8] zodiac 25-Oct-05/3:03 AM Reply
Are you painting a photograph? Touching-up?
[7] Dovina 25-Oct-05/7:28 AM Reply
speak for the spoken silence - maybe leave out spoken.
fall to the floor as ash - maybe leave out fall.
[n/a] FreeFormFixation › Dovina 25-Oct-05/10:25 PM Reply
redundancy is too fun, english is one of the few languages that frowns upon it
[6] <~> 26-Oct-05/10:19 AM Reply
the sounds in these first 5 stanzas are gorgeous!!

the last two stanzas don't pack the punch the first 5 do.

this is a weak simile:

til all they heard from me was silence
like a silent willow tree.

all in all, you weaken the poem when you resolve it. ood, that.