Re: a comment on Buried in the Booth (edit) by drnick	12-Mar-06/6:06 PM
thank you, my good friend. sorry that i've been away for a while...ive lost inspiration recently, as well as being buried in homework. ill be back soon, though.
Re: a comment on Buried in the Booth (edit) by drnick	22-Feb-06/10:15 PM
Ya, it started as a story I wrote but then made the sentences into verses. I don't think it's that simple =]. I need to go through it and clean it up. I'll keep in mind what you've said.
Re: On Looking Back by Dovina	22-Feb-06/6:26 PM
So, uh... what are you doing later? ;]
Re: Buried in the Booth (edit) by drnick	22-Feb-06/6:23 PM
Hopefully someone will take the time to read this...I know I wouldn't.
Re: Nude Falling Down Staircase by zodiac	22-Feb-06/10:52 AM
To be honest, I didn't really get this until I read your responce to ALChemy. Though, to be fair, this is a very "artsy" poem and thus should be difficult to get right away. Anyways, I love it now...especially the last line. Well done.
Re: a comment on Just Desserts (for drnick) by ALChemy	21-Feb-06/6:00 PM
thanks, but certainly not more than anybody else on here.
Re: Just Desserts (for drnick) by ALChemy	21-Feb-06/5:58 PM
There are some small errors in this one, but I like it all the same. I like the way you've worded what you're trying to get across...it's like you've taken the direct meaning and turned your head so it's just barely in your peripheral vision. It's also something I need to work on. It's strange that I agree with what you're saying and everything, but yet find it difficult to be content. Then again, it wouldn't exactly be good to be completely content either as one would have no ambition to achieve anything greater than what they have. Perhaps the best idea is to continue to persue one's dreams while never losing appreciation for what one already has. Maybe I can rewrite my old one with that theme in mind. Thanks for putting this up here for me, that was very kind of you.
Re: a comment on Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick	21-Feb-06/5:41 PM
That would be very kind of you, I look forward to reading it.
Re: a comment on Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick	21-Feb-06/12:41 PM
Yes, I suppose you are right about line 10. The last line is the whole purpose of the poem; that in the hypothetical world, where you have everything you've ever wanted, you would find your existance boring and predictable and thus not worth living. True satisfaction is not something the human mind is able to achieve in this way.
Re: a comment on Conflict Resolution by Dovina	20-Feb-06/3:17 PM
I think I'm going to be sick.
Re: The Struggling Poet's Lament by Ranger	20-Feb-06/10:58 AM
Yes, I've read this one before, but was unable to realize what exactly you were talking about. Now that I know, this is quite a beautiful and amazing piece. You've really done a great job describing the passion behind our words, and our struggle for satisfaction. There are so many good lines in this, but I'd like to point out my favorite(as I always do): "I stumble like the pregnant flame". Very good, and sorry for not commenting on more of your works.
Re: a comment on The Dead Poet's Dream by drnick	20-Feb-06/10:43 AM
How could I do that? Do you mean I should make the entire poem apply to that analogy, or just go into more detail of how we "ski his schemes"?
Re: Conflict Resolution by Dovina	20-Feb-06/8:23 AM
Hey, you actually took some of my advice! I am honored, and I really do think this is better than the first version. The second stanza is much better now!
Re: a comment on The Dead Poet's Dream by drnick	20-Feb-06/8:20 AM
Ya, I completely agree...the ideas don't exactly flow together all too well. The only common ground between them seems to be the general idea of the poem. I liked the idea of this one, and I think it has potential, but I also think that it is far from being done. I just wanted to see what everyone else though, perhaps get some ideas on how to improve. Maybe I could use looser rhymes to give myself more flexability in choise of words? Thanks for the help.
Re: a comment on The Dead Poet's Dream by drnick	20-Feb-06/8:17 AM
No, I haven't checked that out yet, but I deefinately will sometime today. Thanks, as always, for the input.
Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta	19-Feb-06/6:56 PM
I think the only reason people pray (other than the fact that they haven't thought about it in your way) is that it makes them feel like their helping someone without actually doing anything to help them. I'm sure it makes them feel good about themselves. Don't worry though, Jesus loves you...even if it IS in an inappropriate way.
Re: The cat who would fly by nentwined	17-Feb-06/8:31 AM
like the 3rd and last line the best, nice.
Re: a comment on The Gold and silver dress by Caducus	17-Feb-06/8:14 AM
"thibk of the integrity" indeed i am a fool
Re: The Gold and silver dress by Caducus	16-Feb-06/2:09 PM
This is really good, but I'm only giving you and 8 because people on here are writing too good lately. WE NEED TO RAISE THE EXPECTATIONS HERE, PEOPLE. WE CAN'T GIVE NINES AND TENS TO EVERYBODY, THIBK OF THE INTEGRITY. THE GOD DAMN INTEGRITY.
Re: Historical Epic by Bobjim	16-Feb-06/2:05 PM
This is awesome, is the person narrating Les Claypool or David Koechner?