Re: College Bound by Miggy	12-Apr-06/10:40 AM
boring
Re: a comment on Inbetween Lovers/Blueprint by Ranger	8-Apr-06/12:20 PM
Things these days? Drinking like a rock star, and studying like one too. I need to cut back on the drinking, and I should probably work harder on my classes, but I'm so sick of school...I'll be done in december and I don't know what the hell im going to do after that. I'm just trying to have a good time without fucking up everything. Haven't had much time to write, I'd like to write something soon, though, and have it turn out as good as this. What about you? How's life in the proverbial "fast-lane?"
Re: Inbetween Lovers/Blueprint by Ranger	6-Apr-06/12:55 PM
Yes!!! This is the good stuff, my friend. I embelishes how I feel so much that I want to read it to certain people and then tell them to "fuck off." There are so many good lines, I'll name some favorites: 3rd line, 2nd stanza...1st line, 3rd stanza...lines 7-8, 4th stanza...and of course the end line is golden. I wouldn't change a thing, I'm giving you a 9.5.
Re: a comment on Just Desserts (for drnick) by ALChemy	5-Apr-06/10:43 AM
Ya, but this isn't "for" me in the sense that it was written for me, it's "for" me in the sense that I should read it and learn a thing or two.
Re: Pastoral Care (Psalm 23 revisited) by Dovina	5-Apr-06/10:33 AM
I like it, but...psalm? This makes me think of how I was growing up as a teenager, and the sequential maturing into my current relationship with them. The only thing is my mom never rubbed it in like this woman did.
Re: The Day After Next by cyan9	5-Apr-06/10:23 AM
I really like this. I'm not sure that many people know what black and white camera film melting is like, so perhaps you would consider a different analogy. I like the "jerked from frame to frame" and "like children crying and the screeching of worn brakes." Very good imagry.
Re: These Past Sixteen Months by amanda_dcosta	5-Apr-06/10:06 AM
I liked this up until the second-to-last stanza, and I don't think I need to explain why. I like the fourth stanza the best, very nice.
Re: Shy, quiet by Ranger	5-Apr-06/10:01 AM
Well, I didn't catch the club-theme going on here, but I still think this is a good poem. I like the third line. The last line is very good, I can relate to that. All that said, you've done much better than this.
Re: a comment on The Unforgiven II by alvinb	1-Apr-06/1:10 PM
Oh, I can assure you it's copied...line for line.
Re: a comment on Old Friend by drnick	1-Apr-06/1:09 PM
I would hope that one who had assimilated that much information would have had their mind expanded/enlightened in the process, but perhaps that's not the point of college(not to most americans, anyways)? Yes that was the rather weak comparison I was making, and I'm assuming you meant verse four. I'm trying to think of a better last line.
Re: The Unforgiven II by alvinb	31-Mar-06/10:54 AM
Of all the Metallica songs you chose to rip-off, you picked this one?! I'm giving you a zero, obviously, and kicking you square in the nuts(if you have them) if I ever see you. Next time go with something like "Seek & Destroy."
Re: Because You Love Me by amanda_dcosta	31-Mar-06/10:50 AM
This is pretty good, although it was obvious to me that this is about jebus/"God." I do appreciate that you didn't mention that explicitly in the poem, though. It might not be a bad idea to keep the name out from now on so your poems can be related-to by those of us who dont believe in Santa.
Re: a comment on Old Friend by drnick	31-Mar-06/10:45 AM
Hey, I really like that. Would it be wrong of me to use that?
Re: a comment on Old Friend by drnick	31-Mar-06/10:44 AM
Ya, the first line of stanza 2 is a bit lame. I knew it didn't sound quite right, but I couldn't think of anything else so I was hoping someone would help me out. When are you going to post something?
Re: a comment on Behind the storm clouds, the moon consoles the sun.(edited) by ALChemy	30-Mar-06/12:07 PM
Ya, they're just jelous. I think the point is to help someone with one's comments, not try to make their work seem like the worst thing ever written in order to make your own poetry seem significant.
Re: Behind the storm clouds, the moon consoles the sun.(edited) by ALChemy	29-Mar-06/9:51 PM
I am confused as to what is going on here...the mother is the sky, and the father is light? Your niece is a source of her father? I like the thought here, I think you have a good idea, but I would suggest reworking the comparisons.
Re: My Prayer by amanda_dcosta	28-Mar-06/12:53 AM
You should try writing about something other than this "God" fellow.
Re: A Fish is Always a Fish by Dovina	27-Mar-06/8:53 AM
Ain't it the truth? I like how you lured the reader in by making the first 3 statements (lines 2-4) things that we could all accept easily and then "set the hook" with what you really wanted to say. It was hard to disagree. Are you smiling?
Re: After The Snow/Diamonds And Rust by Ranger	24-Mar-06/12:59 AM
Hey Ranger, its been a while. This is good, I like the fourth stanza the best. I also like the repeated line "well I'll be damned." And I can totally relate to the lines "And you haven't visited for a while/ I still think you're beautiful." I'm sorry I can't pur forth a more meaningful responce, but I am drunk. Big surprise. After this semester I'll be back in full, but right now I have no time for poemranker.com =[ Keep up the good work, man.
Re: The Devil's Carnival by Ranger	12-Mar-06/6:15 PM
Another good one, nice title...my favorite line is one of the repeated lines, "flashing lights become a string of pearls," because its so gosh darn purdy. back to homework.