Re: a comment on Seekers by Dovina	25-Sep-05/9:33 AM
It's probably just hoping no beavers come by and start chewing on it.
Re: a comment on Elmer's Last Try by Dovina	25-Sep-05/9:11 AM
For Bush or for the poem? No matter. Same answer. What should I vote on? Brevity-8 Grammar-9 Vividness-6 Compared to your other poetry-4 Soap opera-ness-10
Re: untitled Rubiyat 1 by starkfister	21-Sep-05/2:50 PM
Interesting rhyme pattern.
Re: Light by Quarton	21-Sep-05/2:37 PM
Like Dovina said nice metaphor. This shows the duality between human nature and science. Science has no compassion but human nature has its moments. Your still improving. Which is more than most of us can say.
Re: Elmer's Last Try by Dovina	21-Sep-05/1:55 PM
You forgot to end with th-th-th-that's all folks. Sorry I tried so hard to resist it but failed.
Re: "46 million babies a year" by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	21-Sep-05/1:46 PM
Shitty poem.
Re: a comment on Castle in the Clouds by TLRufener	19-Sep-05/9:40 PM
ok
Re: Across The Spectrum by thepinkbunnyofdoom	19-Sep-05/2:25 AM
Getting better. Meter problems in stanza 2.
Re: Castle in the Clouds by TLRufener	19-Sep-05/2:21 AM
You're lying not laying. I also think your lying the other way too. Why shift into rhyme half way through.
Re: My Name Is by hottemper26	19-Sep-05/1:49 AM
But when will your name be poet?
Re: Castle of Pandas III by FreeFormFixation	19-Sep-05/1:47 AM
They say once you go panda you might loose a handa.
Re: untitled rhyme royal 1 by starkfister	19-Sep-05/1:43 AM
Brilliant!
Re: untitled by starkfister	19-Sep-05/1:41 AM
Your grasp of ebonics astounds me.
Re: Awakening by Quarton	19-Sep-05/1:36 AM
Getting closer.
Re: a comment on My addict by Heather Dee	19-Sep-05/1:23 AM
Please don't tell me it was the old Andrew Jackson school. Sorry. Cheap shot. But did you know the North won. PA (where I'm from) is called the Kentucky of the north. I also hear NC is the South Carolina of the north.
Re: a comment on Leaving Song by wilco	19-Sep-05/1:05 AM
I guess you have.
Re: a comment on Leaving Song by wilco	19-Sep-05/1:04 AM
Wait a minute! You've seen wilco's dick?
Re: a comment on Seekers by Dovina	19-Sep-05/12:57 AM
Actually I just like talking about beavers. Makes me think of pussies. The Kitty cat kind you perves. They both make a really tasty hair pie.
Re: a comment on Seekers by Dovina	19-Sep-05/12:51 AM
Certainly there's some sense of structural design in the dams. I'm just saying maybe George Carlin is right. Maybe our major purpose for being on earth is to make plastic. Because the earth couldn't do it on its own. Doesn't that still make us part of the natural process. Just a bunch of eager beavers cutting down trees, building dams, trying to control the earth.
Re: a comment on Seekers by Dovina	16-Sep-05/5:48 PM
They're not random to the beavers. PS: Thanks for not pointing out I misspelled dam. That's pathetic even by my dyslexic standards.