Re: The Darkness of Eternity by forestchild7	31-Dec-05/6:40 AM
it's = "it is". All your uses of this word should be replaced with "its".
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Jan-06/10:57 AM
Very joyous and alive, it's a pleasure to read :-) I liked the 'gilded' in the first verse; it makes sense. I don't care much for "We are of the earth, they sing, the earth is our body, the earth is our religion.", as it seems to introduce a streak of penny-philosophy into the poem. The last three lines are lovely though, and I found myself smiling as I finished reading.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Jan-06/12:18 AM
Hey, you've got my vote.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Jan-06/8:47 AM
Good! :-) loved the irregular rhyming; it created a feeling of anticipation with each line.
Re: Schoolyard Walls by Joe-joe	4-Jan-06/8:53 AM
"stained glass", not "stain glass". Plus I don't care for the triple dashes ---; one is more than enough. Other than that, it's very nice.
Re: This Is Me by PoeticXTC	4-Jan-06/8:59 AM
Poetry should be about imagination. Your step-by-step description doesn't provoke any thought with the reader; it's just a prettified catalogue of yourself. Perhaps more use of metaphor would render the poem more interesting; as it is, it bores me.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-06/9:40 AM
Dude, you need to distinguish the Old Testament from the New. (although I admit I didn't read it all, wayyy too long and repetitive....) Your very last comparison is wrong, because "An eye for an eye" is related to Judaism. Jews never "turned the other cheek", that was purely Christian and belonged to the later New Testament. So you don't really have any conflict here. P.S. Same for that John bit about the graves coming forth.
Re: After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac	29-Jan-06/11:23 AM
Didn't see the original, but this one is great. :-)
Re: Our Marriage by amanda_dcosta	29-Jan-06/11:26 AM
Sorry, but it sounds like a threesome, and an exceptionally sweet and sticky one at that.
Re: Hailing Miriam by Ranger	29-Jan-06/11:30 AM
It reads beautifully. A little long perhaps, but each individual line is worth it.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Feb-06/9:22 AM
Terrific poem. Gotta agree about the trimming, especially around: "You said still had the reek of blood of bulls And you hated the noise, the tidal roar Of the populace locked in the ring, The thirsty cries goading on the blood ballet" Double use of 'blood' doesn't appeal to me... maybe change one to 'scarlet' or 'crimson'. But other than that, this is such a lovely poem :-)
Re: You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	18-Feb-06/9:38 AM
I thought the double meanings of "Beams like the door Pining for forests long gone" were terrific. Great imagery; I love the way each successive word adds a little more texture to the poem. -9-
Re: cat by Dental Panic	26-Feb-06/9:25 AM
isn't it spelled "airborne"? My fave is the first stanza. Terrific :-)
Re: Today's Spam by nentwined	26-Feb-06/9:39 AM
I always love being encouraged to enlarge my penis... it's so titillating.
Re: the disadvantages of dropping out by FreeFormFixation	1-Mar-06/9:30 PM
...And for some reason, I identify completely with this poem. Made me think.
Re: Whalecrack by wlshepherd	1-Mar-06/9:36 PM
I agree with LilMissLady. I especially liked the fourth stanza ("snake-hipped weaver"!) but I feel your poem lacks the cohesiveness it should have, in that I'm not left with any sort of lingering concept or thought at the end of the poem. No vote, because I think this can be better.
Re: Together They Fell (Prose) by Fayt	1-Mar-06/10:18 PM
It's long; but the fact that I read the whole thing through says something. I think I preferred this as a poem, though; as a story, it's just too full of cliches to sweep me along. The idea is very romantic, and I think with some polish this piece could improve. A good place to start would be with the opening paragraph, which I find clumsy. The redundancy and repetition of "defined by many definitions", "its more pain than I can bear... I cannot bear the pain I feel... this pain I feel" detracts from the body of the poem and is not an adequate introduction. However, like I said, it does show potential, and the final paragraph is very sweet :-)
Re: Pine Boxes (revised) by Joe-joe	1-Mar-06/10:24 PM
more spelling: "suits FARE no better..." I loved the first stanza!
Re: Filler by MacFrantic	1-Mar-06/10:30 PM
ooh! me likee!
Re: At Last in the Garden by ecargo	5-Mar-06/10:30 AM
Heh. I knew this was gonna be good once I read the first line. :-) I thought the contrast between the surging, wild second stanza and the sudden lull in the third was great; I love your imagery.