on medieval myth by ThePariahDog
12 Jan 2005, 7:05 AM
Nice :)
on The Day The World Blew Away by OfaRevolutionAJD
8 Jan 2005, 8:54 AM
That is NOT a glosa
on Moon and History by kawakurdi
12 Jan 2005, 7:09 AM
Awesome!!!
on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
23 Jan 2005, 1:50 AM
Classy!! Beautiful work!
on To You, My Son by Bhaskaryya
23 Jan 2005, 1:54 AM
Trying to be cynical lol
on Forest Rain by bamf909
25 Feb 2005, 10:15 PM
Simply beautiful. Haikus speak volumes in mere 17 syllables.. This is a stupendous example with beautiful imagery.
Great work!
Great work!
on Into the Wreckage by zodiac
25 Feb 2005, 10:18 PM
Beautiful work! I'd have loved to see this with the odd rhymes struck out but it was great nonetheless.
on Itâs the Management by Dovina
25 Feb 2005, 10:25 PM
Lol..that was good.
By the way, what's the job of a fireman during earthquake disasters?? May be they do have work, just that I'm unaware of it! ;)
Nice poem!
By the way, what's the job of a fireman during earthquake disasters?? May be they do have work, just that I'm unaware of it! ;)
Nice poem!
on In (ghazal) by INTRANSIT
21 May 2005, 2:16 AM
Is this even a ghazal? I thought ghazals were a string of couplets which made sense individually too. (Like the pearl necklace which looks beautiful while strung together but is worthy of praise while viewed singularly too)
Ghazals have a certain refrain in the 2nd line of every couplet (and both lines of the first) added with a monorhyme before the refrain.
You need to address yourself in the last couplet (called signature couplet)
Well, there are around 50 rules to make a concrete ghazal and this follows none.
I like the content though.....6
PS: I don't post much on this site, but I'd put up few of my ghazals now if you'd like to look at them.
Ghazals have a certain refrain in the 2nd line of every couplet (and both lines of the first) added with a monorhyme before the refrain.
You need to address yourself in the last couplet (called signature couplet)
Well, there are around 50 rules to make a concrete ghazal and this follows none.
I like the content though.....6
PS: I don't post much on this site, but I'd put up few of my ghazals now if you'd like to look at them.
on some deleted poem
21 May 2005, 2:37 AM
I thoughts ghazals used monorhyme (just before the refrain). Moreover, you didn't use the signature couplet.
Your meter is spot on though and I love the content.
Here's an article that sums up all that a ghazal is: http://allpoetry.com/Column/784848
BTW, I checked the site you cited but they have mistaken the rhyme part. Ghazals don't use end rhyme (though they could be used as a supplement). The rhyme is upon the syllable exactly before the refrain.
I have one ghazal posted among qiite a few I've penned. I'd be glad to receive a comment from you
:)
9 from me!
Your meter is spot on though and I love the content.
Here's an article that sums up all that a ghazal is: http://allpoetry.com/Column/784848
BTW, I checked the site you cited but they have mistaken the rhyme part. Ghazals don't use end rhyme (though they could be used as a supplement). The rhyme is upon the syllable exactly before the refrain.
I have one ghazal posted among qiite a few I've penned. I'd be glad to receive a comment from you
:)
9 from me!
on some deleted poem
7 Nov 2005, 9:18 PM
good imagery though the here/forever rhyme doesn't really draw me in. May be you could find an altogether better line than "then we will live forever"...that seemed a bit hackneyed.
Otherwise it was nice work!
Otherwise it was nice work!
on A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus
7 Nov 2005, 9:19 PM
Beautiful!
on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina
9 Nov 2005, 6:49 AM
Why hold a candle in a bright blue day? Anyway, this was light-hearted and funny. A great read!
I loved the 3rd and 4th stanzas especially!
I loved the 3rd and 4th stanzas especially!
on Szaehling by MacFrantic
9 Nov 2005, 8:41 PM
you a computer nerd? Anyway, this was good!
on some deleted poem
9 Nov 2005, 8:51 PM
May I know why you came and voted a zero to all my poems?
Anyway, this wasn't bad!
Anyway, this wasn't bad!
on Farm animals by INTRANSIT
9 Nov 2005, 8:56 PM
A great poem with some excellent metaphors. However, I hope you wouldn't mind me calling this a loose adaptation of the traditional ghazal. Ghazals are a passion with me and the traditional form comes along various rules and restrictions including rhymes and refrains.
This might help you a bit: http://allpoetry.com/Column/784848
This might help you a bit: http://allpoetry.com/Column/784848
on trully, madly, deeply by Blindpoetry
10 Nov 2005, 7:07 PM
"Your lips are TOO* tight"
Anyway this has a lyrical feel to it and could work if put to some music. Needs a bit tweaking here and there I believe.
Anyway this has a lyrical feel to it and could work if put to some music. Needs a bit tweaking here and there I believe.