Re: a comment on Better Off Dead by wilco	9-Dec-05/11:25 AM
You may have noticed that I no longer comment on DancingShamrock's poems except for occasional one-liners. That's because she has a history of deleting comments. You are starting to show the same kind of record, to which I can only say that yiu'll get few comments from me unless you stop at once! Even if yiu revise a poem, and the comments aeem no longer relavent, do not delete them, unless yiu no longer wish to see my comments. I speak only for myself.
Re: a comment on Better Off Dead by wilco	7-Dec-05/4:56 PM
E played in C?
Re: a comment on Count All the Stars by TLRufener	7-Dec-05/4:54 PM
Yep. Either way's about as easy.
Re: Better Off Dead by wilco	7-Dec-05/3:57 PM
It has a lot of good images and lines, but the comfort of logic is mostly lacking, at least for me. Don't get me wrong, the thing doesn't have to add up to be good, it just does more for me if I find answers to questions like, How is she saved from how life ends up when you’re all alone?
Re: a comment on Count All the Stars by TLRufener	7-Dec-05/2:42 PM
I'll have to give him credit for this unusual display of documentation for his usually exterporaneous arguements. I believe he actually copied each of these lines from the poem and placed it in Google's Advanced Search, under "Exact Phrase" and hit "Search." The total number of sites containing that line becomes his basis for cliche rating.
Re: YOUR OWN PLEASURE by Zoe	6-Dec-05/7:31 PM
It’s not strictly paradelle, which has only four stanzas compared to your eight. Nor does your last stanza contain all of the words in the above stanzas. Nor is it two paradelles, because the fourth stanza does not contain all the words in the above four. Still, it’s a good poem and holds the thoughts together in spite of a very constraining form. It is certainly better than http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=107380 where I mock Billy Collins, the French, and other sticklers to form.
Re: The Dark by cyan9	6-Dec-05/2:01 PM
Very dark indeed. Fear = sanity? Terror = delivery? The semicolon and colon seem unnecessary.
Re: laugh again by skaskowski	6-Dec-05/1:04 PM
How can the rim of a coin be a mobius strip? What metaphor?
Re: The Incubation by oneglove	6-Dec-05/1:00 PM
Wordy in places, but good. The long lines could be shortened or cut.
Re: a comment on Shoebox Thoughts by BrandonW	6-Dec-05/12:49 PM
I count wondering as two syllables
Re: a comment on Irish Holliday by Dovina	6-Dec-05/12:44 PM
Yes, my belssings are duely counted. I saw a flatbed with a little toy fire engine strapped neatly to the otherwise empty bed and wondered if it was you going home for the holidays.
Re: a comment on Irish Holliday by Dovina	6-Dec-05/12:41 PM
Wrong on all three counts as usual. Happy Holidays!
Re: a comment on Irish Holliday by Dovina	6-Dec-05/12:39 PM
Actually he's too big to go in the laundry. "Would he'd fit" is Irish for "I would that he would fit." Merry Christmas, Al, but your poem is blasphemous!
Re: a comment on The Bus by Dovina	5-Dec-05/5:35 PM
I do many evil acts, but retaliatioin voting is not one.
Re: Popular Lovers by wilco	4-Dec-05/1:42 PM
It seems you're comparing a mill (sawmill, gristmill) to a run down apartment, or vice versa. Other than that confusion, it's cool.
Re: Shoebox Thoughts by BrandonW	4-Dec-05/1:33 PM
She sat there staring at our old pictures wondering who was living then
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	2-Dec-05/1:43 PM
No assumption implied. Try hard. It's not that difficult.
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	2-Dec-05/1:40 PM
1 + 1 = 0? That kind of math?
Re: a comment on The Bus by Dovina	2-Dec-05/12:31 PM
Purely by chance do I think like an Indian. I'm sure it's not a bad way to think, but frankly I don't know how to think like that.
Re: a comment on The Bus by Dovina	2-Dec-05/12:29 PM
Yeah, you've got the general idea.