Re: a comment on The Bus by Dovina	2-Dec-05/12:27 PM
In the final throws of "Hitchhiker's Guide to the Universe," God finally gives the answer: "Sorry to have bothered you" It's not exactly the same plot, but I'm asking some of the same questions.
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	2-Dec-05/12:05 PM
You say that Dovina's Emotion is masculine? How could you?
Re: For my unborn by Caducus	2-Dec-05/11:59 AM
In heaven SLEEP my children.
Re: Calenders, Painters and the Boy who imagined Everything by avery	2-Dec-05/11:54 AM
A few suggestions: Use different styles if you want, but not within the same poem. Try for consistency of rhythm, like the rhythm you start with, for example. And try not to mix styles of language, like using "doth" (doeth)in a modedrn English poem. And try not use semicolons so much. And don't give up.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	2-Dec-05/11:44 AM
I do leave holes in my arguments, sometimes on purpose, to give zodiac or Dark Angel room to maneuver, but more often due to carelessness or ignorance. I find it flattering when all they can fault is spelling, grammar, or some trivial mistake. I don’t consider myself a Scrooge, but please accept a Scrooge’s gift: You can, within an hour’s time come at me with a hug and dis me for offensive Silent Night as if each thing I say were independent of the whole For that I thank you and expect no more than for each contrivance that I write to stand upon its own
Re: Light within darkness by Caducus	2-Dec-05/10:13 AM
Could be a Christmas card, a kind of sad beauty. Jesus LIES buried.
Re: Searching by celticskatermatt1	2-Dec-05/10:08 AM
Either you're trying to be funny or this is full of mistakes.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	1-Dec-05/8:51 PM
Agreed.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	1-Dec-05/8:49 PM
Mine is surly takling about subjects related to the bible, but I don't think it's blasphemous because it doesn't berate God.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	1-Dec-05/8:45 PM
No, no. That's not what I meant by my admittedly cumbersome sentence. I meant that I don't search for information on a person or a subject and analyze everything that I can get my hands on unless I really want to discover the truth on that subject. It seemed to me that you were doing a lot of research on the origins of the gospels and I wondered why.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	1-Dec-05/5:33 PM
Yes, but I do not seek out everything I find out about you and study it, trying to decide which items are the most credible.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	1-Dec-05/5:29 PM
I intended it to be offensive. The original words are offensively trite, and need a shaking like a lot of "sacred" add-ons do. I find it interesting that if Silent Night came out today as a new song, it would probably be shrugged off as something to make fun of.
Re: One by rahson_s	1-Dec-05/5:07 PM
More essay than poem. How does domination or elevation of a race affect equality among other races?
Re: a comment on Thunder by dooley	1-Dec-05/4:27 PM
Because: "The thunder applauds us" "spurred by lightning our hearts . . . fall in love" "scares me to death Brings . . . a shake to my breath" "And there we will prove that some poems are wrong They are wordy and gusty and go on too long"
Re: Thunder by dooley	1-Dec-05/2:29 PM
I agree with zodiac, and if you stay here very long you'll know that's rare. You've don it again - put virtue lower than sin, at least to some. It seems a strange line at the end of a love poem. Too many words in many of the lines for my taste. But overall it's good.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	1-Dec-05/2:07 PM
I don't know if wilco is an atheist, but he seemed offended. See his comment below. I think I've offended darn near everyone with this, on this Thursday, thanks to Thor.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	1-Dec-05/2:00 PM
I have objected purposelessly. Apology accepted. Is there some other way to object? There truly is, as you have so often said, something I am not getting.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	1-Dec-05/1:53 PM
The gospel of Luke carries the most detail of the four, and is often considered the most reliable, except perhaps for Mark. Luke also probably wrote the book of Acts. There is disagreement on Mark's age during Jesus' later years. In any case, whoever wrote the book of Mark probably wrote from hearsay. May I ask why you have studied the criticism of bible texts?
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	1-Dec-05/1:41 PM
I think you said I did a you three years ago. I don’t know about that, but I did a me 1.5 years ago. Today, I’d either call it a prose poem or make it less verbose with better meter.
Re: Virtue and Sin by dooley	30-Nov-05/9:15 PM
I presume all the quotes are from the 8-page poem. They seem scattered as shown. But the kicker is "Virtue for women is lower than sin . . .Virtue is a trait few women can see." Do you really mean that?