Re: The True Fate of Humpty Dumpty by Joe-joe	25-Jan-06/10:35 AM
I find it funny. Too many words though, agreeing with ecargo. Starting with "there" seems better as "a sill hides neatly." "it's" is its, a common mistake. A story poem like this is better said with verbs simply used in simple sentences, and I think with minor changes you can do this.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	25-Jan-06/10:28 AM
Yeah, several have said similar things. Thanks. I've already revised it, and could ropost, but usually don't. I find it more useful to incorporate any insights or angsts into the new thing.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	24-Jan-06/11:59 AM
Do we dare ask?
Re: a comment on When God is Needed No More by ALChemy	24-Jan-06/11:58 AM
Please stop wallowing in your beer, it's not manly. You have not failed miserably. You have succeeded in showing a facet of God that is not commonly shown, and which I rather like. And even a little more Biblical reference would be okay in this setting. I see it as recognition of God's goodness in making us, and His even betterness in making us so good that perhaps we don't need Him after childhood. I find it a concept worth pondering, but not completely agreeable.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	24-Jan-06/11:29 AM
Sorry, I don't get it.
Re: a comment on On Golden Bond by jmalone	24-Jan-06/11:27 AM
Yes, I see how the grandmother gave him what he needed and sent him out, like God does in your poem. But "scope" is unclear, except that it rhymes, and what does "to keep the waters still" mean?
Re: Rain by dancin_n_da_moonlite	24-Jan-06/11:23 AM
I wish you would not recycle all of your poems in one day. Give us a break!
Re: a comment on When God is Needed No More by ALChemy	24-Jan-06/11:19 AM
I understand the last four lines, but they seem like a summary of what has already been preached (and I've already said that I don't mind the preaching in this pooem. That would not be bad, except that the closing lines are dogmatic ("it is God's plan") and bland ("his good children"), and only the last line seems important. Sorry to stomp on your children, accidentally of course.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	24-Jan-06/11:09 AM
What on earth do you mean? I always want a gentleman!
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	24-Jan-06/11:08 AM
It's always good to know a man's genetics before any serious discussion. Thanks for giving yours. And please stick around this time.
Re: a comment on A Schizophrenic by amanda_dcosta	24-Jan-06/11:06 AM
The "Mood . . ." sentenced is vague and bland at written, in my opinion. Your explanation of it is crisp and clear. So although my question is satisfied, the sentence is still not so good.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	24-Jan-06/10:49 AM
We want them to be gentle, that’s all. And we know it’s not their nature, at least for many rams. The poem overstates that, I admit, but it’s for emphasis. Good point.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	23-Jan-06/9:00 PM
These are good observations and suggestions. I’ve made revisions based of some of them, though you don’t see them here. Thanks. Your comments on poems by others have likewise seemed worthwhile. I see you’ve been commenting since 11/02, but your poems are few and recent. I am much newer here and can’t help wondering what username you went by then and what happened to the many poems you must have posted before this January. No answer is necessary, and I won’t keep bugging. It’s good have you around.
Re: A moment, homeward by ecargo	23-Jan-06/6:39 PM
A frosty feel to it in two ways.
Re: Untitled by frahj	23-Jan-06/4:30 PM
Raise the seat please, then lower it when finished. Thank you.
Re: a comment on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT	23-Jan-06/4:17 PM
I have just given birth. test that for irony.
Re: a comment on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT	23-Jan-06/3:38 PM
Yes, but for the glympse, the occasional light, the bang for the buck spent. Don't take anything on poemranker too literally.
Re: a comment on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT	23-Jan-06/3:26 PM
No, really it's just not understanding what people mean most of the time and trying to sort it out.
Re: a comment on Gaze by AuntyM	23-Jan-06/3:21 PM
I agree with Alchemy here, and don't understand what you're getting at on the INTRANSIT poem.
Re: a comment on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT	23-Jan-06/3:16 PM
In a place where good means bad, and bad good, my one-liners are good.