| Re: a comment on Time Thief by Dovina |
28-Mar-06/7:43 PM |
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Are you one of those guys who move fast and make lots of mistakes?
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| Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy |
28-Mar-06/7:39 PM |
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It's crap, and you know it.
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| Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy |
28-Mar-06/7:35 PM |
Soft Concrete
To be called a twott
With newness of thought
On a poem I called a mess
To the end that he messed it no less
Totals out to a nonpoetic pest
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| Re: Kristi's Quiescence by matt door |
28-Mar-06/7:29 PM |
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Poems for the last 300 years or more have expressed similar sentiments, but they are new for each new lover. Carry on, and try to make it as original as is possible with such a cloud of witnesses.
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| Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy |
28-Mar-06/7:22 PM |
Alchemy is not really mythical. I meant that his recent poem about the sun and moon sounds like a myth sounds.
I find the affectation of old styles has a charm that does not have to be comical, if done well.
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| Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy |
28-Mar-06/7:11 PM |
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fax, megabyte, cellphone, to name a few more. But little has changed under the sun in human relationships, but we don't give up on describing them. Every love is new.
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| Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy |
28-Mar-06/7:05 PM |
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Alchemy, of course. And I am not his PR rep. And even if there were no others, and there are, I would still maintain that it's an ok thing to do.
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| Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy |
28-Mar-06/7:00 PM |
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His most recent poem has a mythical tone to it also, but by his explanation, we know he was not trying to be antiquated, except in his method of poresentation. His thoughts seem entirely up-to-date. I see nothing non-reality or melodramatic in using the poetic structures of other generations to express current thoughts.
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| Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy |
28-Mar-06/6:36 PM |
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But surly not a zero's-worth. Contemporariness is not surely that important.
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| Re: Behind the storm clouds, the moon consoles the sun.(edited) by ALChemy |
28-Mar-06/6:29 PM |
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Very aptly timed considering tomorrow's total eclipse, where the moon will block the sun in Africa. They are saying pregnant women should not look at the spectical or their babies will be born with hair lips. And your poem is the stuff of myth, too. If you had written it three thousand years ago, it might have given birth to gods.
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| Re: a comment on My Prayer by amanda_dcosta |
28-Mar-06/2:43 PM |
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I don't think Mandy is trying to draw anyone into her Christianity. Maybe she is, but not in this poem. She tries to explain her condition (exposition) and admits that it lacks what she wants. I was comparing that to what Anne Sexton is showing in only one of her poems. I was not relating Amanda's life as a whole to Anne's life as a whole.
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| Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina |
28-Mar-06/1:36 PM |
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Much better than mine. Go for it!
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| Re: a comment on My Prayer by amanda_dcosta |
28-Mar-06/1:34 PM |
Welcome Morning by Anne Sexton
There is joy
in all:
in the hair I brush each morning,
in the Cannon towel, newly washed,
that I rub my body with each morning,
in the chapel of eggs I cook
each morning,
in the outcry from the kettle
that heats my coffee
each morning,
in the spoon and the chair
that cry "hello there, Anne"
each morning,
in the godhead of the table
that I set my silver, plate, cup upon
each morning.
All this is God,
right here in my pea-green house
each morning
and I mean,
though often forget,
to give thanks,
to faint down by the kitchen table
in a prayer of rejoicing
as the holy birds at the kitchen window
peck into their marriage of seeds.
So while I think of it,
let me paint a thank-you on my palm
for this God, this laughter of the morning,
lest it go unspoken.
The Joy that isn't shared, I've heard,
dies young.
Anne Sexton revels in happy god-aspects of ordinary things in her life. Amanda could use her Goa experience to the same goal, but instead she is expositional and self-searching, but not proselytizing in my opinion. Both are good techniques. I donât prefer either on that basis.
I enjoy Anne Sexton.
http://www.geocities.com/SoHo/Cafe/1324/sexton.htm
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| Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina |
28-Mar-06/12:03 PM |
"Why the Cats Stay Away from My Piano" by Scarlet
They have no sense of rhythm,
no ear for an E
What they seek in a piano
is fluffy, carefree
They don't want to practice
scales are a chore
they need to be dropped in
behind the black door
Bad, okay.
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| Re: a comment on Piano by Dovina |
28-Mar-06/11:48 AM |
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Not your students, surely. Not unless they're like me.
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| Re: a comment on My Prayer by amanda_dcosta |
28-Mar-06/11:40 AM |
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| Re: Ghosts of years (rhymey edit) by ecargo |
27-Mar-06/6:46 PM |
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It's hard to follow at the beginning, but the last 3 verses bring it together. Then on going back, it works well from Verse 2 on. Verse 1 seems disconnected.
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| Re: Mirror by Sunny |
27-Mar-06/6:34 PM |
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The first line bewilders me. Mercury, lying on a plate, spreads out in what could be an oval, and reflects like a mirror. The poem makes sense after I pass that obstacle, and until mercury appears at the end. But there, it must be some metaphor. Okay, I must have it all wrong.
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| Re: a comment on A Fish is Always a Fish by Dovina |
27-Mar-06/6:25 PM |
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I disagree, and always have.
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| Re: a comment on A Fish is Always a Fish by Dovina |
27-Mar-06/5:01 PM |
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I already have grown up to be a fish, and I don't blast someone for theft, even if he copies a well-known song and posts it as his own.
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