Re: a comment on Poor Unwritten Rabbit by Dovina	20-Jul-04/9:10 AM
Sometimes naievete in rabbits is hard to distinguish from a keen sense for sizing up their predicament.
Re: a comment on Poor Unwritten Rabbit by Dovina	19-Jul-04/2:37 PM
You can be so linguistic sometimes that it's hard to decipher. Yeah, some transitional ditties there might help. Thanks.
Re: a comment on The Two Temperaments of Man by dougsoderstrom	19-Jul-04/2:24 PM
It was probably the pig. Do porcupines make noises when you sit on them? You can be so poetic sometimes that it's hard to decipher. If you are asking why I find the poem intriguing, it is because the two sides of this issue claim the same advantages and accuse each other of the same defficiencies using different jargons.
Re: Knowledge has such high demands by Torok	19-Jul-04/12:40 PM
Verse 1 needs a look at the wording, "possession" The rest is pretty good.
Re: The Two Temperaments of Man by dougsoderstrom	19-Jul-04/12:13 PM
Verse 2 is both puzzling and intriguing because either statement could apply to either of the positions in Verse 1 depending on how you look at it. Verse 3 "as human beings" Verse 4 states your position on the matter, and seems best left out. You might want to classify this as Prose Poetry.
Re: Walking in a field by donmiguel1960	19-Jul-04/11:32 AM
It's a funeral in verses 1 and 2. But when daughters laugh, I wonder. Verse 4 doesn't seem to follow.
Re: a comment on Adieu by cuddlytiger17	19-Jul-04/10:21 AM
I agree. I wish you would read my poem, "Sacrament" again and my comment to you.
Re: Never Ceasing to Amaze by wilco	19-Jul-04/10:10 AM
How else can we keep four or five of you on the string at once?
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	19-Jul-04/9:57 AM
The calves are part of the kids who ate them and at least one of the kids lacks custody and filanders in nightclubs. Thanks.
Re: Nothingness of The illusion by Prince of Void	18-Jul-04/4:02 PM
Sometimes it's less painful to think of a person who hates us and with whom we have to live as an illusion. It's not ideal, but useful. Try a : after "The only thing he found out"
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	18-Jul-04/2:59 PM
Thank you, but why 6?
Re: Veins of spilt wine. by SupremeDreamer	18-Jul-04/2:57 PM
I have crafted poems which have puzzled me in time, became paradoxes and riddles I had not intended. But rather than becoming “convinced of their insignificance . . . or . . . stigmatized by capricious alienation,” I have sometimes reveled in “subtle intricacies [that] emerge incognito from tense silence.” - maybe some of the things in verses 2 and 3. Verse 4 starts to turn this thing around, and verse 5 has the great line, “Thoughts stem from an undertow urge to be the victim.” But rather than nod to the value of the poem’s transformation as it merely sat there, the last verse maintains “a ghostly-grim humorist suffocated by pessimism.” The last three words are pivotal, and I’d like to see them change.
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	18-Jul-04/10:52 AM
Thanks for the advice, but I'm still trying to get beyond the breakers at Long Beach.
Re: Countdown by TearsOnRoses	18-Jul-04/10:43 AM
It seems the numbers are there to rhyme, unless I'm missing something. Last two lines are good.
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	17-Jul-04/3:42 PM
Thank, I really miss it there.
Re: a comment on Sacrament by Dovina	17-Jul-04/8:40 AM
Not unlike a poem that expresses some real aspect of a person's understanding, but fails utterly in its use of literary references and the accepted poetic devices.
Re: Southern Mississippii Standstill by wilco	16-Jul-04/1:53 PM
Very sensual, pleasing.
Re: a comment on Sacrament by Dovina	16-Jul-04/1:16 PM
Sort of what I thought. Maybe he'll read it again and find something besides blasphemy. Thanks for the info.
Re: a comment on Sacrament by Dovina	15-Jul-04/7:39 PM
When coupled with your 10-vote, this comment is very funny and compassionate, perhaps made by one who might be taking a little bread and wine as we speak.
Re: a comment on Sacrament by Dovina	15-Jul-04/7:34 PM
Thanks, and that would shorten it and make it more readable. I was holding to the tenor of the Bible text in order to show a relationship of pain and the way she symbolized hers with respect for His.