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Walking in a field (Free verse) by donmiguel1960 Leaves fall early
Children close by
shedding tears of pain
Walking in a field
A relative dying
A spouse fighting
falling to the sane
Walking in a field
Young couples struggle
Daughters laugh
as fathers cry
Walking in a field
Comfort found
Love deeply embraced
as Happiness is gained
Walking in a field
Up the ladder:
Tomorrow
Down the ladder:
a scene in american ghetto
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Posted: July 19, 2004 2:34 AM PDT; Last modified: July 19, 2004 2:34 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.1490035 Overall Rank: 5332 Comments:
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zodiac @ 217.23.37.85
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19-Jul-04/3:10 AM
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Life must seem incredibly big and exciting to you. Does it?
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donmiguel1960 @ 68.96.168.211
> zodiac
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19-Jul-04/9:55 PM
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I think so, I mean, I like it. Sometimes the problem is that I feel to much. I write to try and cope.
It's a funeral in verses 1 and 2. But when daughters laugh, I wonder. Verse 4 doesn't seem to follow.
the poem is about lifes trials. not a funeral, just the daily struggel.
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