Re: a comment on Untitled by Dovina	19-Mar-07/9:05 PM
Haiku is not the use of a formula like 5-7-5.
Re: Whispers the Pariah by Enkidu	18-Mar-07/8:11 PM
Take the l out of suckling
Re: A Lesson by nypoet22	18-Mar-07/8:07 PM
You must be a good teacher if they react in any way at all.
Re: a comment on Business As Usual (Nothing Personal) by poetry_rancour	14-Mar-07/2:57 PM
Try adding something like: Downsize to the heart and lungs/And don’t forget the tasty brain
Re: Jess and Andrea during english class by jesslew	14-Mar-07/1:03 PM
Jess is a woman (can have children) apparently by Andrea, a man. Then Andrea will soon be a mom. Nice. At least the lines are 5-7-5.
Re: Wait by MacFrantic	14-Mar-07/12:57 PM
Sung, it might move me, but just reading, it seems like repetitive meander without arriving.
Re: You Could Be A Winner by poetry_rancour	14-Mar-07/12:53 PM
Yep, those are about equal odds. "dividend" works, but "strife"? Maybe something more fatal.
Re: Business As Usual (Nothing Personal) by poetry_rancour	14-Mar-07/12:49 PM
Sorry, I don't picture this beast.
Re: a comment on Abused Light by Greeny	14-Mar-07/12:43 PM
Are you reading the long debunked King George Version, or are you astoundingly, radiantly ignorant of Scripture? Having made humans in His image, God indirectly made everything we made.
Re: a comment on Pedaling West by Dovina	14-Mar-07/12:41 PM
But pedaling like a muppet is an excuse for poetry, as a brain drained of blood to service pushing legs puts out its best verse. I took off the training wheels after ten thousand miles and am practicing on the lower bars after thirty thousand. It has been a blasphemous ordeal, and one that’s brought a great deal of shame, but after this cross-country ride, I hope to have the experience needed to take on the Santa Monica Bike Trail.
Re: Abused Light by Greeny	13-Mar-07/3:03 PM
Good descriptions of fireworks exploding in the night, if that's what it is. I don't see why light is abused, unless the fireworks are irritating someone; it's not clear. I think "expose" needs an apostrophe on the last e. The semicolon should be a colon or dash, I think.
Re: a comment on Her Mitts by Nepanthe	13-Mar-07/2:29 PM
I trusted him once in regard to a low-sounding syllable at the end of my line, which he said offended with its highness. I layed it down inverted, which he found quite agreeable.
Re: a comment on Her Mitts by Nepanthe	13-Mar-07/2:04 PM
Oh, please stay. It's been so lonely here with only the newby smut-slingers, and their oldby look-alikes.
Re: a comment on Her Mitts by Nepanthe	13-Mar-07/2:01 PM
No, you may not.
Re: a comment on Pedaling West by Dovina	13-Mar-07/1:47 PM
Good suggestion. The mindset of cycling is, well, cyclic; the poem should be so too.
Re: a comment on Pedaling West by Dovina	13-Mar-07/1:35 PM
The trouble is that it's not fanciful. This trip begins on May2 and goes pedaling along, rather un-cutely for 120 days if I survive. I've blitzed along the towpath of the Erie Canal in New York, but this is much longer, slower, more mountainous, and demanding of a firm mindset. I wish it were not.
Re: Her Mitts by Nepanthe	13-Mar-07/1:26 PM
Ranger is right - the last line inversion sucks. The internal rhymes of Verse 1 are nice.
Re: a comment on Pedaling West by Dovina	13-Mar-07/1:22 PM
You're not staggered? Okay, neither am I. It's a proposal then, a document to abide by, a declaration to be slammed with if I reneg. I'll work on it.
Re: a comment on a limerick from kent by nentwined	13-Mar-07/12:32 PM
Yep, it's a limerick from Kent.
Re: a comment on Pedaling West by Dovina	13-Mar-07/10:49 AM
Please don't pray for that. My God, do you suppose his manhood will be threatened?