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Jess and Andrea during english class (Haiku) by jesslew
J: hello Andrea you are always beautiful just like jessica A: jessica lewis i love you so very much please have my children J: your hair is golden you don't like it when it's touched but i still stroke it A: a beauty you are almost as pretty as me please have my children J: your name is Schmidty i don't spell it properly i prefer Andrea A: your smile is cute i want to lick your braces will you please let me? J: please have my children that is what you have asked me guess what? im pregnant A: you will be a mom and i will soon be one too let's celebrate babe J: haikus are fun making babies is more fun but we are both moms A: come to my dungeon i promise i will not bite we will play all day J: i love your blond hair why am i in your dungeon? why are we naked? A: never leave me Jess i will never let you out and i keep your clothes J: no, not my braces let me out of the dungeon give me my clothes back J: im calling the cops im not having your children! don't touch my braces A: you're being extreme im saying this out of love do not call the cops J: i want to love you please give me my clothes back or i'll touch your hair A: that's it, we are through i will not be your lover forget you know me J: i will chase you down i can make my own dungeon you'll live there with me A: the tables have turned you want me so bad right now you cannot have me END

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Overall Rank: 8681
Posted: March 13, 2007 7:12 PM PDT; Last modified: March 13, 2007 7:12 PM PDT
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[6] Dovina @ 75.82.86.162 | 14-Mar-07/1:03 PM | Reply
Jess is a woman (can have children) apparently by Andrea, a man. Then Andrea will soon be a mom. Nice. At least the lines are 5-7-5.
[n/a] jesslew @ 65.95.232.26 > Dovina | 14-Mar-07/5:57 PM | Reply
no Andrea is a girl as well...saying "have my children" does not actually mean what it seems like.
[8] Ranger @ 81.103.124.179 | 15-Mar-07/3:06 AM | Reply
Change the first line of stanza 12 to "Ne'er leave me, Jesu"
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