Re: a comment on Resume by drnick	16-Jun-07/3:44 PM
Men typically handle love horribly, you less horribly than most.
Re: a comment on Between two Truths by Dovina	16-Jun-07/3:36 PM
Would you prefer "styles in worship like designer jeans"?
Re: a comment on Between two Truths by Dovina	16-Jun-07/3:33 PM
That makes two of us facing a small army. Lock arms brother, here they come.
Re: a comment on Between two Truths by Dovina	16-Jun-07/3:30 PM
I was trying for a pun on the drink "Southern Comfort" but maybe it's too funny for the subject.
Re: a comment on Between two Truths by Dovina	16-Jun-07/3:26 PM
The "one great offer" isn't trite. My musings - maybe.
Re: Resume by drnick	15-Jun-07/2:16 PM
The first two verses say it all. The rest gets into the nitty of how and why. But Why do that?
Re: a comment on Between two Truths by Dovina	15-Jun-07/2:08 PM
Would "in churches colored as cars" be eccentric enough? Most Kentucky counties are "dry," where beer cannot be legally sold. You can bring it in though, and I assume that's what you mean. I find it unique that cigarettes are legal everywhere in the south including public places and the churches find that just hunky dorewy.
Re: Bonded by Skamper	15-Jun-07/8:35 AM
Something like the comfort in my recent one. Nice job.
Re: Take-Off by oneglove	13-Jun-07/10:12 AM
The comma after I is distracting. The caps at line starte are inconsistent. Otherwise good.
Re: a comment on Dixon Country Store, Kentucky by Dovina	13-Jun-07/10:06 AM
That's the way folks in the country of Kentucky are: matter-of-fact. And superstitious too. their lives depend on the weather, as the folks in Greensburg, Kansas, will tell you. Eighty percent of the ones that survived the tornado lost their homes.
Re: a comment on Dixon Country Store, Kentucky by Dovina	13-Jun-07/10:02 AM
I changed it on my computer only, not on poemranker. Anyway, your suggestion is better.
Re: The Call by Skamper	11-Jun-07/2:42 PM
I don't get it.
Re: rear end of the storm by malpaso	11-Jun-07/2:39 PM
Midwest rain will soak you this time of year, but it's a happy kind of soaking when the air is warm. At the front of the cloud is where the lightning lurks and where a lone cyclist or pedestrian sticks up like a rod to catch it, either that or the funnel.
Re: a comment on leaves of clover by lmp	11-Jun-07/2:24 PM
I think the use of the Apis mellifera is too technically distracting for a poem of this kind. Your theme is good, but to introduce God's power into it near the end seems true, but out-of-place.
Re: a comment on Dixon Country Store, Kentucky by Dovina	11-Jun-07/2:22 PM
I changed S2, L2 to “heat like we don’t get til August;” that gives ia bit of southern drawl and does away with the duplicated word.
Re: My Sinatra by sca	9-Jun-07/2:39 PM
Sinatra serenades for the suffering secretary - on the radio driving home.
Re: leaves of clover by lmp	9-Jun-07/2:37 PM
"the bees drone on" is a good line because drones do no work. So I wonder at "Drones' labor" Also, the truck would have been loaded with honey, not nect'r or nectar. "we never knows"??? Otherwise pretty good.
Re: Call Someone Right Away by jessicazee	6-Jun-07/12:09 PM
It's a sad kind of funny. Just enough to make me think so anyway. More detail would help. And it's a bit too prosaic for poetry.
Re: Beslan by Ranger	6-Jun-07/12:01 PM
I heard a balalaika played with Russian hands, and would prefer the singular in line 1, makes is more personal. And the possessive friction's in line 2 seems superfluous. Why is the fretted frame splintered? The triangular frame might be splintered, but the frets are on the fingerboard, and splinters would hurt. I like the sound of this, "holy minor fall of Hallelujah" especially.
Re: a comment on The Happy Side of Misery by Dovina	5-Jun-07/3:15 PM
Your interpretation is good. The truck came bearing down on the cyclist, then it passed without incident, as they all have so far. But it's always a concern and cause for continued dilligence.