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Resume (Free verse) by drnick Game over
dreams come true
happily ever after
now what?
Happy not comfortable
lost inside eyes
lost inside smile
for time being.
Worried while alone
thoughts provoke
false reality
mocking at a dream.
Haunted by a kiss
sobering future
somber skies fly
at time of leaving.
Bleeding burning wounds
choking heart
sobbing skin
all too soon.
Now resume.
Up the ladder:
Black Love
Down the ladder:
B.L.C. LONG GONE
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Posted: June 15, 2007 1:04 PM PDT; Last modified: June 15, 2007 1:04 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.1490035 Overall Rank: 5318 Comments:
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Dovina @ 72.161.151.195
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15-Jun-07/2:16 PM
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The first two verses say it all. The rest gets into the nitty of how and why. But Why do that?
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drnick @ 216.144.215.157
> Dovina
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16-Jun-07/12:25 PM
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This is about a friend I've liked for a long time and who has recently told me she feels the same towards me. Thus the first two lines. The "nitty" are my thoughts/feelings towards the question of "now what?" as we are both moving away in about a month and a half. Personally I'm trying not to get too involved because of the impending move, but I'm finding that very hard to do. It's a tricky situation that I'm handling horribly. Thanks for letting me unload this upon you, whether or not you care ;)
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Dovina @ 72.161.233.65
> drnick
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16-Jun-07/3:44 PM
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Men typically handle love horribly, you less horribly than most.
The funny thing with the first two stanzas is that they're a sort of guarded joy, almost like you don't expect anything to last, and it bothers you, whereas the next three stanzas sound like you don't care about that fact. It's much the same with starting 'game over' and ending 'now resume' - I like that facet.
But, of course, good luck with it :-)
I'm glad you caught/enjoyed that. It's more that I have no control over the feelings than that I don't care; quite frustrating. Also, no matter what happens the outcome is undesirable.
I think I need some GHB more than I need good luck ;)
What's GHB? I bet it's not what I was thinking.
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