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Resume

by drnick

Member since 2005 · Posted 15 Jun 2007 · 6 comments

Game over dreams come true happily ever after now what? Happy not comfortable lost inside eyes lost inside smile for time being. Worried while alone thoughts provoke false reality mocking at a dream. Haunted by a kiss sobering future somber skies fly at time of leaving. Bleeding burning wounds choking heart sobbing skin all too soon. Now resume.

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[8] Dovina 15-Jun-07/2:16 PM Reply
The first two verses say it all. The rest gets into the nitty of how and why. But Why do that?
[n/a] drnick › Dovina 16-Jun-07/12:25 PM Reply
This is about a friend I've liked for a long time and who has recently told me she feels the same towards me. Thus the first two lines. The "nitty" are my thoughts/feelings towards the question of "now what?" as we are both moving away in about a month and a half. Personally I'm trying not to get too involved because of the impending move, but I'm finding that very hard to do. It's a tricky situation that I'm handling horribly. Thanks for letting me unload this upon you, whether or not you care ;)
[8] Dovina › drnick 16-Jun-07/3:44 PM Reply
Men typically handle love horribly, you less horribly than most.
[9] Ranger 21-Jun-07/4:55 AM Reply
The funny thing with the first two stanzas is that they're a sort of guarded joy, almost like you don't expect anything to last, and it bothers you, whereas the next three stanzas sound like you don't care about that fact. It's much the same with starting 'game over' and ending 'now resume' - I like that facet.

But, of course, good luck with it :-)
[n/a] drnick › Ranger 21-Jun-07/9:30 AM Reply
I'm glad you caught/enjoyed that. It's more that I have no control over the feelings than that I don't care; quite frustrating. Also, no matter what happens the outcome is undesirable.

I think I need some GHB more than I need good luck ;)
[8] Skamper › drnick 21-Jun-07/4:31 PM Reply
What's GHB? I bet it's not what I was thinking.