Re: Farm animals by INTRANSIT	18-Oct-05/3:49 PM
Your premise: "We only awaken once" It took awhile to see the sun as one awakened thing, the rooster as another. But then you say "then," well, seems it should be "or" or something not implying two awakenings of the same thing. And the butcher block - chips? Oh, somebody must be constructing it, because they don't give off chips in normal use. Then I lose you when chips awaken as farmer and farm.
Re: a comment on How Angels Smell by Dovina	18-Oct-05/3:38 PM
Okay, immitate British spelling if you think it adds good stuff: flavour, colour, odour. Just beware the errour, the tremour, the inferiour humour your apt to find here.
Re: Air Guitar by Miggy	18-Oct-05/3:10 PM
"through the night" I disagree with "one day we will get this world right."
Re: a skinny man on the dock by ay deee	17-Oct-05/7:10 PM
May I steal your last line? It's great - could use it in lots of places. But it doesn't seem to fit here.
Re: a comment on monday v2 by ay deee	17-Oct-05/6:57 PM
So do I. It's what separates us and gives us that unique, adorable character men cn't resist.
Re: a comment on Figment by Dovina	17-Oct-05/4:57 PM
Dovina's magic - CROWD: You're not levitating. You're just standing there. DOVINA: It's all in having faith like a mustard seed. Everyone levitates. The trick is in doing an unordinary thing. Blaaaat.
Re: There is a journey tree by ALChemy	16-Oct-05/6:28 AM
The metaphor brings up fears that the tree, perched on the brink, will eventually fall over, as real trees so perched usually do when a storm comes. But the greater fear is that any such hypothetical refuge doesn't really exist.
Re: Waking at night by Niphredil	15-Oct-05/12:47 PM
The word "dull" seems too bland. Otherwise I like it a lot.
Re: never visit a diner twice by Bill Z Bub	15-Oct-05/12:42 PM
No comma after diner. I think that "left in the gutter" makes the idea inconsistant. I'd leave out "left." Otherwise very concise and good.
Re: Sleep It All Away by somemorepoetry	15-Oct-05/12:37 PM
Line 4 seems there only for the rhyme. Just wrap YOUR arms all around me. But I like the sentiment and the subtle implications. With thr right tune, it'd make a good song.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	15-Oct-05/12:15 PM
Your summary is good up to your rephrasing of my my last response. My answer to "And what's the point of saying that anyway?" was not "Blaaaaaaaat." Please read it again.
Re: a comment on Rocky Road by Dovina	15-Oct-05/12:07 PM
I am so flattered.
Re: a comment on Figment by Dovina	15-Oct-05/12:03 PM
I’m an amateur magician. Just ask zodiac. He’s seen my magic a dozen times over, and never has figured out how I do it. All he can say is “Ha.”
Re: Creatures That Crawl To Me by D P Robertson	14-Oct-05/11:15 AM
A dream of redundant fears. Could be a lot shorter, but maybe you wanted to stress the recurrance.
Re: Midnight Questions by TLRufener	14-Oct-05/11:11 AM
I answered in the negative or with unconcern to most of your questions, but "How many people would mourn you and cry?" is worthy of thought.
Re: I Can't Believe He Killed Her by jessicazee	14-Oct-05/10:59 AM
And maybe he didn't. The sister coming along late in the poem - ok, but confusing. Comma after "I think." Good overall.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	14-Oct-05/10:52 AM
For the gazillionth time, evolution is a theory that explains observations. It may not be the only theory that explains them, but it works much of the time. So, it's a good theory til something better coimes along. I hope you will at least agree with this. I think at this point you're just being antagonistic for its own sake.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	12-Oct-05/6:00 PM
Nonsense!
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	12-Oct-05/5:58 PM
I agree with your thesis. Saying that something is made by evolution gives it importance because it says that it fits a theory, and in fitting, the thing can be understood in the context of that theory. For example, if faith developed through evolution, then the broader concepts of evolution can be applied to faith. For exaample, we could say in that case that faith may then increase our ability to survive and reproduce, which would help to perpetuate faith in future generations.
Re: Sleep by ALChemy	12-Oct-05/5:45 PM
I think you'd do better without the Jesus references - messiah and Nazareth. A naritave on sleep is ok in itself. The comparison to soul sleep is good.