poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Dovina (201-220) and replies

Comments byDovina, 201–220 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Voice of the World by Dovina 2 Nov 2007, 3:31 PM
You got that right. I never was any good at political poems. It just seems like we ought to listen more and shoot less.
on homer simpson by malpaso 1 Nov 2007, 8:46 AM
I like embiggens.
At least capitalize her name.
Line 4 adds ambiguity - good.
I don't know homer, would like to.
on Dulacca - for a day by Skamper 1 Nov 2007, 8:39 AM
A nice nostalgia. Where is this joint?
on a bit of theory by pete 26 Oct 2007, 4:28 PM
It would be nicer if you give reasons to proclamations. I agree though.
on On Any Given Day... by Skamper 26 Oct 2007, 4:25 PM
I love "she speaks cream linen from painted lips." Too many dashes throuout.
replying on _______ by Dovina 26 Oct 2007, 4:18 PM
It's because haiku is best untitled. Of course if I called it haiku, I'd only get the dunce comment "5-7-5."
replying on Nomad's Oasis by Caducus 25 Oct 2007, 8:43 AM
Either I was a dunce 2-1/2 years ago or you have changed it a lot; I suspect the former. "devoured refusal to stop searching" - it matches the previous line, but can go too many directions. Otherwise good.
on Bullfrog Night by Musicman 24 Oct 2007, 11:40 AM
I hate the 5-7-5 restriction some people place on haiku, which in this case requires an unnecessary "the" in line 2. Otherwise good.
on Winter Moon by Musicman 24 Oct 2007, 11:39 AM
This is good. I think the telling "bittersweet" opener can go. "the serpentine swell" - drop "the" I think. Actually, take a look at all the articles in verse 2.

We are not all dunces here, but most have left due to boredom. Welcome.
on I Hope by BrandonW 7 Oct 2007, 7:15 PM
A good theme and mostly well executed. The rhymes seem more distraction than poetry. and "I hope" at the end adds what?
on Under The Knife by PoetryIsDead 7 Oct 2007, 7:09 PM
too involved for haiku, I think. But the last line is clever.
replying on Rooster Rape by Dovina 1 Oct 2007, 3:48 PM
ok, “gender” is better than “sex” I’ll give you that. Wait, no I won’t.

How is the house/henhouse thing confusing? He owned the henhouse and would have owned the house too, if we had allowed it.

Wow, You won’t even allow me a bit of cadence with “I forgot him for a moment / abandoned watchful glance.” Too wordy? A hard taskmaster you. A rooster on my back.

I thought the last line was hilariously funny, and you simply frown – a comedian’s worst outcome.
replying on Another Date by Dovina 27 Sep 2007, 4:07 PM
The crutch for me - he'd have to do that too. If so, he might just do.
replying on Master by Dovina 27 Sep 2007, 4:04 PM
Holy Cow, I hardly believe it myself. Might hold the record for slowest passage coast-to-coast by bicycle. Did I pass you in Kansas, looking at daisies?
replying on Rooster Rape by Dovina 27 Sep 2007, 4:01 PM
No, but it sounds interesting. Too heavy? How, please?
replying on Master by Dovina 21 Sep 2007, 12:51 PM
Yes, I am strong-willed, and yes, I cower to the right man. So damned few of them here on poemranker, it's easy to understand your impression.
replying on Master by Dovina 21 Sep 2007, 12:49 PM
The ride across America ended August 30 with a tire dipped in the Pacific. My luck with weather, dogs, snakes, scum, and logging trucks was too good to be called lucky. And supplication had a part: cars are bigger, let them pass.
replying on Master by Dovina 20 Sep 2007, 2:34 PM
If you were daft you'd mutter nonsense like "yetch" or "sick." Apparently you have never experienced the joy of cowering. It's restful and feminine. Thanks for commenting, we get so few these days.
replying on Master by Dovina 20 Sep 2007, 2:28 PM
Please tell me how it is cynical.
replying on Master by Dovina 20 Sep 2007, 2:27 PM
In what way is the title cynical?