Re: a comment on Voice of the World by Dovina	2-Nov-07/3:31 PM
You got that right. I never was any good at political poems. It just seems like we ought to listen more and shoot less.
Re: homer simpson by malpaso	1-Nov-07/8:46 AM
I like embiggens. At least capitalize her name. Line 4 adds ambiguity - good. I don't know homer, would like to.
Re: Dulacca - for a day by Skamper	1-Nov-07/8:39 AM
A nice nostalgia. Where is this joint?
Re: a bit of theory by pete	26-Oct-07/4:28 PM
It would be nicer if you give reasons to proclamations. I agree though.
Re: On Any Given Day... by Skamper	26-Oct-07/4:25 PM
I love "she speaks cream linen from painted lips." Too many dashes throuout.
Re: a comment on _______ by Dovina	26-Oct-07/4:18 PM
It's because haiku is best untitled. Of course if I called it haiku, I'd only get the dunce comment "5-7-5."
Re: a comment on Nomad's Oasis by Caducus	25-Oct-07/8:43 AM
Either I was a dunce 2-1/2 years ago or you have changed it a lot; I suspect the former. "devoured refusal to stop searching" - it matches the previous line, but can go too many directions. Otherwise good.
Re: Bullfrog Night by Musicman	24-Oct-07/11:40 AM
I hate the 5-7-5 restriction some people place on haiku, which in this case requires an unnecessary "the" in line 2. Otherwise good.
Re: Winter Moon by Musicman	24-Oct-07/11:39 AM
This is good. I think the telling "bittersweet" opener can go. "the serpentine swell" - drop "the" I think. Actually, take a look at all the articles in verse 2. We are not all dunces here, but most have left due to boredom. Welcome.
Re: I Hope by BrandonW	7-Oct-07/7:15 PM
A good theme and mostly well executed. The rhymes seem more distraction than poetry. and "I hope" at the end adds what?
Re: Under The Knife by PoetryIsDead	7-Oct-07/7:09 PM
too involved for haiku, I think. But the last line is clever.
Re: a comment on Rooster Rape by Dovina	1-Oct-07/3:48 PM
ok, “gender” is better than “sex” I’ll give you that. Wait, no I won’t. How is the house/henhouse thing confusing? He owned the henhouse and would have owned the house too, if we had allowed it. Wow, You won’t even allow me a bit of cadence with “I forgot him for a moment / abandoned watchful glance.” Too wordy? A hard taskmaster you. A rooster on my back. I thought the last line was hilariously funny, and you simply frown – a comedian’s worst outcome.
Re: a comment on Another Date by Dovina	27-Sep-07/4:07 PM
The crutch for me - he'd have to do that too. If so, he might just do.
Re: a comment on Master by Dovina	27-Sep-07/4:04 PM
Holy Cow, I hardly believe it myself. Might hold the record for slowest passage coast-to-coast by bicycle. Did I pass you in Kansas, looking at daisies?
Re: a comment on Rooster Rape by Dovina	27-Sep-07/4:01 PM
No, but it sounds interesting. Too heavy? How, please?
Re: a comment on Master by Dovina	21-Sep-07/12:51 PM
Yes, I am strong-willed, and yes, I cower to the right man. So damned few of them here on poemranker, it's easy to understand your impression.
Re: a comment on Master by Dovina	21-Sep-07/12:49 PM
The ride across America ended August 30 with a tire dipped in the Pacific. My luck with weather, dogs, snakes, scum, and logging trucks was too good to be called lucky. And supplication had a part: cars are bigger, let them pass.
Re: a comment on Master by Dovina	20-Sep-07/2:34 PM
If you were daft you'd mutter nonsense like "yetch" or "sick." Apparently you have never experienced the joy of cowering. It's restful and feminine. Thanks for commenting, we get so few these days.
Re: a comment on Master by Dovina	20-Sep-07/2:28 PM
Please tell me how it is cynical.
Re: a comment on Master by Dovina	20-Sep-07/2:27 PM
In what way is the title cynical?