Re: A Book's Plight by amanda_dcosta	25-Jan-06/11:11 AM
Maybe you mean it as metaphor, but I doubt it. Seems an old man would ponder Jordan's River and wish he'd been read, absorbed, and written. Instead, he's just tried to make facinating and new what was neither. Elderking's recent poem is like this in feeling.
Re: Sinning Sinners and Their Sinful Sins by MacFrantic	25-Jan-06/11:15 AM
Cute, though wordy, title. But the poem is not cute, but sad, arguing therby with the title.
Re: Tree of Life by ALChemy	25-Jan-06/6:30 PM
Tree of Life could be from Genesis and Eden, or it could be the evolutionary tree of species. I go with the latter, but it's vague.
Re: Glitterati by ecargo	25-Jan-06/6:43 PM
Dusel is one of those easy-to-be-bored-with party yuppies that spoil most parties with fluff and smirk at poets, and are the reason I seldom go to parties anymore, unless they're about something more. I'm surprised you didn't point out the poets' disruptive potential, unless you're saying they're the complicit kind who are no different from Dusel.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-06/10:52 AM
Could it be that a book written by many authors, over some 600 years, in different times and cultures and in different languages, and then translated into english from several manuscripts of questioable origin, would agree internally in every case? The amazing thing is that it holds together as well as it does.
Re: Prozac by Glasseyez	26-Jan-06/1:51 PM
You have a worthy subject for a poem, and in some ways it's a good poem as written. I say this because it's poorly constructed and incompletely thought out, which reflects the key line, "I used to be deep but something happened."
Re: My testament to free speech by Glasseyez	26-Jan-06/1:55 PM
You've given in to a popularized box called life. There's more out there than you say.
Re: Our Marriage by amanda_dcosta	27-Jan-06/11:51 AM
The meter is not so steady in this that you need devices like "ne'er" to maintain it. And why "learnt" not learned? The cross/toss rhyme seems unnecessary where rhyming is not the pattern. Likewise "'morrow." These poeticizing attempts only detract from you free style which has its own kind of poetry.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jan-06/1:18 PM
Thinking about the Bible, and Michael D’s flight to skid row or someplace, and your wonderment about Bukowski’s stint there, and alchemy's great summary of Michael D's brief stay, where else is anything both as succinct and as early as this: “The race is not to the swift or the battle to the strong, nor does food come to the wise or wealth to the brilliant or favor to the learned; but time and chance happen to them all.” Ecc. 9:11 NIV God>Solomon>Bukowski>god'swife
Re: How small, this sleeping tiger by ecargo	28-Jan-06/9:32 AM
Poetically speaking, this is good. It has form, unusual expression, metaphor (I think), and harks of Frost. For those reasons, I'd vote 10. But the reason I did not, and did on Elderking's recent one, is that the best poem, in my faulty opinion, is not the best written, it's the Trojan Horse that smuggles titillation into my sheltered life. Not sexual titillation necessarily, but connection with myself. Yours does that as I feel the tiger's caged existance, and I think you're hinting at more, but what?
Re: Hailing Miriam by Ranger	28-Jan-06/9:44 AM
A flurry of great lines, and then the ending. Who is Lorelei? A mystical, colorful, and sad read.
Re: more of the same by calliope	30-Jan-06/12:43 PM
And, speaking for the forum, we do forgive - forgive "a myriad" when myriad would do, forgive that you mean "myriad words." But I lit this, the thought of it.
Re: let me know by skaskowski	30-Jan-06/4:42 PM
May I rent one of the forgotten rooms in your delightful-sounding house? It must be a fine place to thrash through the sewers looking for all the lost keys I've swallowed.
Re: Time, Indeterminate by ecargo	30-Jan-06/4:57 PM
She hasn't much to send him, or much to buy it with, and when the baby comes, she'll have less. Still, her poems he passes 'round, and keeps the whale's picture she found the money to sponser. "What a woman!" I hear him say.
Re: necrobos by baphomet	30-Jan-06/5:02 PM
I must be crazy to say this conveys anything, but except for her being "teen to b" it does.
Re: yo yo yo, ride by FreeFormFixation	30-Jan-06/5:08 PM
This would be a 10 if it made less sense. Some good lines, but they're mixed with ramparts of regret and other concludable free form fixations.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Jan-06/11:57 AM
Etherial indeed. It sounds like a priestess exerting her influence over a penitent follower. I don't know why she keeps saying "I do not need" or variations of it, as if the priestess is uncertain of her abilities and needs to keep reassuring herself.
Re: Giving in to a boring suggestion by Joe-joe	31-Jan-06/12:03 PM
lol. It took me awhile to get the "awl" but it works. "a martyr" should be "martyrs."
Re: Les Imagistes by Nicholas Jones	1-Feb-06/11:15 AM
I like CS Lewis on the use of imagination. His image of the lion in Narnia, for example, came as a dream, but he developed the image, the character, beyond the initial vision using logic and allusion. Your duck walking on ice, and confused by the image of walking on water, is ready, as think you might be implying, to make something poetic and meaningful from that experience.
Re: Unhappy Marriages by Caducus	2-Feb-06/1:57 PM
"Free spirits caged on a pedestal" - great line. "masques" I think you mean "with twice sung hymns" grammar Married to God implies a num, but the preceeding seem like a human marriage. the title seem too descriptive, too blunt.