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Sinning Sinners and Their Sinful Sins (Free verse) by MacFrantic
We met at an intersection Him there with brooding eye A solitary gym sock Pulled halfway up his calf Riding a bike that wasn't his We met and we dodged The cars that pulled us to them Sure to make us break Any concentration Between this rival and I I cracked a little In my blended smirk and Venemous glances Caught him in sudden sentences That tumbled profane From his lips came an ooze A dark chocolate banter Fighting to cover his stench that made little comprehension Amid the drowning sounds He put the pedal to his toe And rocked back in anger And I rocked forward to be sure And we collided there A pile of crushed hatred we never knew

Down the ladder: a week off

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9602656
Overall Rank: 8642
Posted: January 24, 2006 8:52 PM PST; Last modified: January 24, 2006 8:52 PM PST
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[6] Dovina @ 17.255.240.6 | 25-Jan-06/11:15 AM | Reply
Cute, though wordy, title. But the poem is not cute, but sad, arguing therby with the title.

[8] zodiac @ 209.193.14.133 | 25-Jan-06/11:20 AM | Reply
If you define 'sinning' as 'performing a sin', 'sinners' as 'people who sin', 'sinful' as 'full of sin' and 'sins' as 'more than one sin', your title becomes

People Who Sin Performing a Sin and Their More Than One Sin Full of Sin
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