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Sinning Sinners and Their Sinful Sins (Free verse) by MacFrantic

We met at an intersection Him there with brooding eye A solitary gym sock Pulled halfway up his calf Riding a bike that wasn't his We met and we dodged The cars that pulled us to them Sure to make us break Any concentration Between this rival and I I cracked a little In my blended smirk and Venemous glances Caught him in sudden sentences That tumbled profane From his lips came an ooze A dark chocolate banter Fighting to cover his stench that made little comprehension Amid the drowning sounds He put the pedal to his toe And rocked back in anger And I rocked forward to be sure And we collided there A pile of crushed hatred we never knew

Dovina 25-Jan-06/11:15 AM
Cute, though wordy, title. But the poem is not cute, but sad, arguing therby with the title.





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