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Back Off (Free verse) by erin35 Back off, don't pull on me...
don't tug or paw or hang on me.
I am flesh, blood underneath
I feel each pinch and twist.
Back off, do not crowd me...
don't box or squeeze or squish me.
I am Spirit, my soul within.
I fly in open air.
Back off, don't rush me...
do not push or cajole me.
I am quiet, peace unmoved.
I thrive in solitude.
Up the ladder:
Cursed thoughts entering this open mind
Down the ladder:
Servant Boy
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Posted: February 7, 2005 7:33 PM PST; Last modified: February 7, 2005 7:33 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.9602656 Overall Rank: 8684 Comments:
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sliver @ 64.12.116.135
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7-Feb-05/10:32 PM
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This one just feels kind of stilted, for lack of a better word. Maybe choppy, no. well, I ramble. Perhaps just a bit smoother? Or... maybe it's just me, what the hell do I know.
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