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Giving in to a boring suggestion (Free verse) by Joe-joe
A highly enthused awl is presently making its way to China just outside my 10 X 10 holding pen where paper clips, loose change, and an empty soup container quiver like a martyr with badly timed second thoughts. Pens and pencils give into the fray While a wayward phone and staple remover stubbornly bore off temptation and I, less inclined to resist, il o h ae f y rmln rtes Yed t te ft o m tebig bohr.


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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2
Weighted score: 5.1430435
Overall Rank: 5442
Posted: January 31, 2006 6:37 AM PST; Last modified: January 31, 2006 6:41 AM PST
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[9] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 31-Jan-06/8:12 AM | Reply
Very readable...'a martyr with badly timed second thoughts' made me laugh out loud, for that this is worth a 9...very creative indeed!
[6] LilMsLadyPoet @ 207.69.137.10 | 31-Jan-06/8:23 AM | Reply
cute...
'a martyr'...excellent line!
[8] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 | 31-Jan-06/12:03 PM | Reply
lol. It took me awhile to get the "awl" but it works. "a martyr" should be "martyrs."
[8] ecargo @ 167.219.88.140 | 1-Feb-06/6:55 AM | Reply
Ha--cute. Want to take on my upstairs neighbors who walk on hard wood floors in high heels?
[n/a] Joe-joe @ 170.28.4.4 > ecargo | 1-Feb-06/10:14 AM | Reply
I would if I could but you can see that I have:
"il o h ae f y rmln rtes
Yed t te ft o m tebig bohr." translated = yield(ed) to the fate of my trembling brothers...the guys in in office didn't catch the bouncing characters so I'm not so sure my little lettering play was detected here.

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