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Time, Indeterminate (Free verse) by ecargo
He tells me his beardâs grown longâ
the razor issued with his blues,
his sheets, his rough towels, has been stolen.
âA bunch of crooks,â he writes
on yellow wide-rule, punctuated
with a faint, penciled smile.
(They stole his pens too.)
For Christmas, I adopted a whale
named Zeppelin, in his name;
sent the bio and a photograph
in fuzzy black and white.
Iâll send him updates on the sightings:
where it goes, its mates, its calves.
(âYouâre the only one who got some tail
for Christmas,â his celly said to him.)
He passes âround the poems I send,
the sexy note I wrote while in the bath
(I canât get mad),
the articles I tear from magazines,
remembered travelogues I scrawl
on postcards kept from places where weâve been:
Boulder Field and New York City,
Graceland gray with rain.
I save to send him money for the small
indulgences they sell;
buy interesting stamps--he liked
the antique cars and constellations best.
His letters tell of winning chess,
old books, his work to pass the days.
He says he saves my letters,
the ten that theyâll allow.
(The phoneâs gone since I couldnât pay the billâ
five dollars the first minute, and every minute dear.)
When the babyâs born, Iâll find
some one to drive us down. At least heâll get
to see it through the glass. Iâm sick a lot,
and sad, but keep it to myself;
describe the babyâs room,
send lists of names and what they mean:
Jana (God is gracious) or maybe Jack.
He says he dreams of little hands.
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Arithmetic Mean: 9.5
Weighted score: 6.2102365
Overall Rank: 975
Posted: January 29, 2006 7:27 PM PST; Last modified: January 29, 2006 7:27 PM PST
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The only line that lost me was "named Zeppelin, in his name;" - is there something going straight over my head here?
Either way, very nicely done.
Thanks for the comment. No plans to write a sequel, but you never know.