| Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT |
11-Jun-04/11:55 AM |
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pretty good job there INTRANSIT.
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| Re: Shamefaced by Doug |
11-Jun-04/2:28 PM |
How many people visit this site anyway? Like 3 a day?
Could somebody critique my poem please?
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| Re: Turdzilla by Shardik |
11-Jun-04/2:57 PM |
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Childish yet funny.I think you smoke too much weed.
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| Re: The Pear Blossom Highway by Shardik |
11-Jun-04/3:03 PM |
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smack dab in the middle-wow you are brilliant!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
11-Jun-04/3:07 PM |
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You sure know your flowers!
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| Re: Poet by Shardik |
11-Jun-04/6:22 PM |
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A sad little poem about a sad little boy,still afraid to grow up,still afraid to love a woman after 23 years,so sad.Almost made me cry.
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| Re: Heat by Shardik |
11-Jun-04/6:27 PM |
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I was asleep by the third line!Very lame.
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| Re: It was... by Shardik |
11-Jun-04/6:48 PM |
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Wow,I thought you could'nt be worse-proved me wrong again!
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| Re: The Ocean Prefers A Sunset by wilco |
11-Jun-04/6:55 PM |
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Godswife why are you so bitter? you really need to get a life outside of lame internet sites...really!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
11-Jun-04/7:28 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
11-Jun-04/7:47 PM |
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Could it be any longer?My God!
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| Re: Fighting before bed by zodiac |
14-Jun-04/12:50 PM |
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crass nomenclature,wow you are such a wordy gimp.
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| Re: In love as in war by zodiac |
14-Jun-04/1:20 PM |
Jimmy,maybe write about what you know,instead of this sad little fantasy of jerking off a man in uniform.
It seems clear you know nothing of war or love(or writing a decent poem).Oh and your music sucks as well.
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| Re: tripped on an eggo by horus9 |
15-Jun-04/7:26 PM |
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| Re: Dealer (a senyru) by Mona Lisa |
15-Jun-04/7:27 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
15-Jun-04/7:30 PM |
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You have a point Shin Shuu,but the poem should be for you,not publication.
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| Re: Girl and a Drugstore Novel by snacktime |
15-Jun-04/7:43 PM |
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Better than anything "god's wife" could dream of putting on paper!Don't let his or her self loathing stop you from self expression.Keep writing how or what you feel.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
15-Jun-04/7:55 PM |
Not bad at all.I give you a seven.
P.S."god's wife" please stop being so great and wise.
It makes you sound so sad and lonely.
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| Re: You can seize my smile by Prince of Void |
15-Jun-04/8:10 PM |
Not bad,but you need to use a more compact, yet broader range of words,maybe something that flows just a tad better.And by the way never take "god's wife's" sad caption as being an actual person's opinion.
Keep putting your words on paper!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
15-Jun-04/8:17 PM |
Yes, the first three lines are not needed,but still pretty decent.
P.S. "god's wife" is a terrible and lowley critic!
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