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Dealer (a senyru) (Other) by Mona Lisa A Derelict house,
abloom in dead hibiscus
dreams are sold cheaply.
Up the ladder:
Next time
Down the ladder:
Sophia, Lets get this over with(Rewrite)
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.8
Posted: June 15, 2004 3:20 PM PDT; Last modified: June 15, 2004 3:20 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.3337684 Overall Rank: 3471 Comments:
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Mona Lisa @ 195.92.168.178
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15-Jun-04/3:21 PM
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5-7-5 structure like a haiku, but not of nature but of life.
EXCELLENT. and you even called it the right name!
Thwere should be a period at the end of the 3rd line, or no puncuation at all.
Well done!
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