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Shamefaced

Member since 2004 · Posted 11 Jun 2004 · 4 comments

Doggie dreams may seem absurd- to peoples complex reason, but a man's musing mind may seem the same- to the great god of Bloomington. And through the gray bar gauntlet of worst truth and spit, hateful stares flinging cum and shit- one just might meet Humiliation, but come time of timorous-tangled death- your sure to know Him well.

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[n/a] Doug 11-Jun-04/2:28 PM Reply

How many people visit this site anyway? Like 3 a day?
Could somebody critique my poem please?

[8] Dan garcia-Black 17-Jun-04/7:59 PM Reply

I like the idea and the follow through. I trip over some of the images in line five. I think you mean "You're sure to know Him" right? -8-

[6] Caducus 2-Dec-05/1:51 AM Reply

If more concise this could be good but as you're a bit of a dick for the way you critiqued my work I can't be bothered to waste my time.

A shame because your work isn't half bad but you moan about how many hits your getting and you leave comments like - "your work sucks big panther nuts"

Not the brightest crayon in the box are we.

[7] ALChemy 2-Dec-05/4:54 AM Reply

Offbeat but also off beat. Some apostrophe problems.
Edit and make some cuts. 7