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Shamefaced (Free verse) by Doug

Doggie dreams may seem absurd- to peoples complex reason, but a man's musing mind may seem the same- to the great god of Bloomington. And through the gray bar gauntlet of worst truth and spit, hateful stares flinging cum and shit- one just might meet Humiliation, but come time of timorous-tangled death- your sure to know Him well.

Dan garcia-Black 17-Jun-04/7:59 PM
I like the idea and the follow through. I trip over some of the images in line five. I think you mean "You're sure to know Him" right? -8-




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