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You can seize my smile

Member since 2002 · Posted 15 Jun 2004 · 6 comments

You can seize my smile And Leave me to the woes of breeze You can give me a dark yellow rose On the day buried in ocean of misty yellow dreams You can say goodbye to my yellow woods castle You can touch me as yellow leaves Fragile, perishing, doomed Iâm yellow drops Falling behind you In the forever fall I am ashes of all your fancies The Grey, shrouded with shadows Vanished slowly in twilight From frozen dew to my yellow lips From green yard to graveyard You canât see me as yellow moon On the night I sank in yellow tears It last only in illusion Of my own fancy girl You still lean the light Iâm still watching you... As if you are right... You are the eternity That I canât reachâ¦.

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[0] god'swife 15-Jun-04/3:19 PM Reply

Your crowns on too tight.

[n/a] Prince of Void › god'swife 18-Jun-04/12:45 PM Reply

thank u ...but im not king ...to wear the crown that is too tight ....i hope that u dont think waht god's wife think ???

[6] Doug 15-Jun-04/8:10 PM Reply

Not bad,but you need to use a more compact, yet broader range of words,maybe something that flows just a tad better.And by the way never take "god's wife's" sad caption as being an actual person's opinion.
Keep putting your words on paper!

[n/a] deleted user › Doug 15-Jun-04/8:15 PM Reply

Hi.

[n/a] Prince of Void › deleted user 18-Jun-04/12:42 PM Reply

Hi ..how u doin ? thank u for reading my poem ...

[n/a] Prince of Void › Doug 18-Jun-04/12:49 PM Reply

thank u so musch ...i kown poetry is sth we try to show how we understand the senses of being known ..unknown ..bing in love ...being in peace or happpiness...so many example..we just need some understanding ....