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You can seize my smile (Free verse) by Prince of Void You can seize my smile
And Leave me to the woes of breeze
You can give me a dark yellow rose
On the day buried in ocean of misty yellow dreams
You can say goodbye to my yellow woods castle
You can touch me as yellow leaves
Fragile, perishing, doomed
Iâm yellow drops
Falling behind you
In the forever fall
I am ashes of all your fancies
The Grey, shrouded with shadows
Vanished slowly in twilight
From frozen dew to my yellow lips
From green yard to graveyard
You canât see me as yellow moon
On the night I sank in yellow tears
It last only in illusion
Of my own fancy girl
You still lean the light
Iâm still watching you...
As if you are right...
You are the eternity
That I canât reachâ¦.
Up the ladder:
Deep Thought
Down the ladder:
Farewell
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Posted: June 15, 2004 9:05 AM PDT; Last modified: June 15, 2004 9:05 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10139 Comments:
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god'swife @ 4.231.167.124
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15-Jun-04/3:19 PM
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Your crowns on too tight.
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Prince of Void @ 217.218.131.143
> god'swife
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18-Jun-04/12:45 PM
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thank u ...but im not king ...to wear the crown that is too tight ....i hope that u dont think waht god's wife think ???
Not bad,but you need to use a more compact, yet broader range of words,maybe something that flows just a tad better.And by the way never take "god's wife's" sad caption as being an actual person's opinion.
Keep putting your words on paper!
Hi.
Hi ..how u doin ? thank u for reading my poem ...
thank u so musch ...i kown poetry is sth we try to show how we understand the senses of being known ..unknown ..bing in love ...being in peace or happpiness...so many example..we just need some understanding ....
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