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on Mourning Glory by William Delacroix 21 May 2004, 12:24 AM
Beautiful title. I like the intrigue of the piece, although i dont like the usage of the 3rd stanza in union with the Glosa theme. But the overall structure and concept works pretty nicely, given the difficulty. Also it seemed to putter out due 2 maybe trying 2 hard towards the end, its too predictable. I think it needs a surprising climax, given that the reader( if they know the style ) knows what line will conclude. You did a great job of elaborating the founding peice and throwing a creepy twist in while you were at it. Kudos

_Da1
on Blackened Cauldron by Ellie95 21 May 2004, 12:28 AM
Ohhh. K. Obsess much?
on How I fuck Freud off in the shower by horus8 21 May 2004, 12:48 AM
DISGUSTINGLY DELICIOUS!
on Something's gone wrong by zodiac 21 May 2004, 12:57 AM
Captivating and satisfying. You get a gold star for today.
on Bon Voyage by Jeremi B. Handrinos 21 May 2004, 1:01 AM
Unique
on Just A Thought by thepinkbunnyofdoom 21 May 2004, 1:09 AM
Very representative. I can relate and am entranced with the approach of this peice. Nicely done, although the repetition may be a bit much. Any how it suffices.

_Da1
on To be titled by Horus8(Craft's Service) by thepinkbunnyofdoom 21 May 2004, 2:36 AM
Special
on Let Me Swing by caitydee 21 May 2004, 2:42 AM
Are you still together? Or is that an appropriate question? I would cahnge "Our bodies fit that day--We fit", maybe, " Our bodies, we fit on that day. Other than that its cool.
on Re-drafting by Nicholas Jones 21 May 2004, 2:54 AM
Funny
on Oomphless by shwenatjadeflower 21 May 2004, 3:21 AM
I would add a,'still' after "is" in the 2nd to last line and then make it the last line. But well done
on Opera by ~incarnate~ 21 May 2004, 12:16 PM
Yes, between sexy and simple there lies a fine line. Yet this peice may not cut the mustard. C for effort.
on some deleted poem 21 May 2004, 12:20 PM
A man after my own heart. Keep it grity.