regarding some deleted poem...	18-Sep-02/5:50 AM
I can't believe that I haven't voted on this poem despite suggesting titles and god knows what else - what an oversight. Did you check out some Ted Hughes?
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Sep-02/6:37 AM
I don't really understand what's going on here, but the sound of the verse is lovely.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Sep-02/6:39 AM
How dare you post a description o me and then pretend that it is P&K! How you know these things about me I couldn't say, but the likeness is frightening.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Sep-02/6:42 AM
This is the kind of dream that could send a man mad. Please let this not be P&K, for I shall fear him even more
Re: A Passing Love by razorgrin	18-Sep-02/7:02 AM
The comments on this poem have become seriously deranged.... I just like the story of your poem. Drugging your lovers is the best way of maintaining a relationship. But the first stanza doesn't rhyme in my accent - we say 'sconn' not 'scown'. Please be more considerate of your southern English readers.
Re: Walls by razorgrin	18-Sep-02/7:27 AM
I wonder if the room with walls the colour of heartblood is actually a metaphor for your heart? The alliteration of 'w' is good, creating the effect of the woind. And don't get rid of the definite articles because they give this poem a knotty, medieval rhythm that sits well with the wolves.
Re: Stifled by wordsphincter	18-Sep-02/7:32 AM
What are stolen lips? Give them back. The last line makes no sense - your eyes may never grasp courts? the nocturnal companion courts something that the eys will enver grasp? I've never seen eyes grasping anything anyway - yeuurch.
Re: cars by mogwai	18-Sep-02/7:33 AM
This is sweet.
Re: 1 of 2,543 things she does that starts fires in your grassland heart. by mogwai	18-Sep-02/7:36 AM
It is a great suggestive title and maybe it would be nice to see it taken up in the poem itself, but I still like the scene that's presented here.
Re: Freeform (No votes yet) 0 comments by abecedarian	18-Sep-02/7:53 AM
It is the same for us all. By the way, if you are an abecedarian don't you believe that it's wrong to learn to read? What are you doing on a poetry site?
Re: dps 2 - new ver. by decadentlaurel	18-Sep-02/8:05 AM
Version 1 is much better than this - simpler, more honest, less 'poetic'.
Re: Virus by bluwiz	18-Sep-02/8:38 AM
Ther's a lot of truth to this, and to your Infection poem as well - you handle metaphor very well.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-02/2:14 AM
Great stuff as usual. This sounds like the song of Everywoman.
Re: I hate people by Bazilla	19-Sep-02/2:34 AM
I think you just need some friends....
Re: Baked Peach Cobbler Windowed by horus8	19-Sep-02/3:01 AM
Uncles are rarely trustworthy. Keep your distance.
Re: "REAL" People by Scouser	19-Sep-02/7:39 AM
These a very valid points, given that we're on the brink of a war that no one wants... (in UK anyway)
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-02/7:43 AM
This is the only one of yours I haven't commented on yet. It's not my favourite perhaps because it sounds Biblical (Song of Solomon) in tone to me and that always puts me off, but the ending has the right crushed feeling.
Re: Little lady by dolores	19-Sep-02/7:44 AM
I like this - there's a big implied story behind the poem. The simplicity of what the girl 'says' is very childlike.
Re: quickie by <~>	20-Sep-02/1:12 AM
Slinky as a snake in grease. Another poem to use the word 'tug' - poemranker is obsessed.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Sep-02/1:20 AM
It was obviously a sexed up time on poemranker last night. Shame I wasn't around to add my own two-penn'orth to the whole horse/man dilemma. My first experience of sex was when the horse i was riding vigorously mounted a young mare while i was still on its back. Ever since I have felt somewhat in awe of our equine friends. But I don't have a room full of them. I've been very careful, oh Queen of Bigamy, and stuck to just a couple of ladies. Seems much easier!