Blindpoetry
on I⦠the blank paper of unsaid things by Prince of Void
14 Apr 2005, 3:07 PM
Unless my age deprives me of known knowledge, I thought that this was a very good piece.
Well, unique, anyways.
I bet if you could construct a sentence that made sense your insults would be ace?!
nice poem, but you are wrong, this is what it is to be alive and happy
one could also say, that "i woke and could not believe i was still alive / i wished so much that i could die/ im stunned at the pain that the world is filled with / what kind of meaning can one find in this life......and afterward, when is tep out to get the paper/ i am overcome by the futility of it all/ gowing through the motions/ i feel the sharp air stabbing my lungs, look somebody just died/ this is what it is to be alive / everything is a mistake the stars / are mocking me with their happiness/ how can they enjoy being lonely/ at night i stand outside staring/ at the sky, distant planets and suns/stunned by the vast expanse of the universe/ in which i am the source of nothing/ nothing good, nothing evil/ i am nothing and am of no importance/ not even my name will be remembered
just throwing that out there
-megan
love it
i understand the emotion and have felt it before, but you need to lighten up on the language, and edit it some before it is really good
it's a good poem
this is almost too weird but not quite
Stop making assumptions. I truly do not care of grammar and in actual fact treat all critisism contructivley and positivley.
If you genuinely wanted to master grammar, you wouldn't be so indignant when people tried to correct you on it. Either you're too thick to master grammar, or you're just too much of a freestyling maverick. Yes, that must be it.
Ouch obviously touched a nerve there, well why dont you stop hanging around your computer all day and get a life.
1. I dont get stressed I am on the journey into spiritual development and meditation.
2. The last two lines simply mean it is not the words you use but the actions you choose.
3. I am only 17 meaning I have many more years to grow, how long have you.
4. Being offensive over someone elses work just shows how egotistic you really are you fu*king idiot.
5. The reason these poems do not make complete sense is because I freestyle them onto paper hence grammar is but a subject I will master with time and practice.
Swallow that mister.... mister..... mister......
Yeah thats right what the F*ck does he know apart from the way his own thought pattern works (ha ha ha )
Wish I could turn this into something good but with not one comment about the poem you are not needed within this subject.
Thankyou Steve, I do understand grammar is important its just I feel I can be more flexible without it. Plus if everybody decided to do this we would still understand each other.
Thanks for the positive response.
If he were truly an architect, he would not refer to his prints by the antiquated "blueprints" or draw their originals with compas and straight edge, but with CAD.
A long time ago I thought you were reading what I said before bashing it. No I think you just bash without reading.
My utensils of creation comprise:
A laminated guff buttock injected with tramp pellets
A doily-flavoured groin-operated dwarf foetus disguised as a beardtronic ultrabum harvester
An unspeakably disappointing spoon coated in vicar discharge
A pneumatic fatally abnormal hobo sausage injected with vicar concentrate
-10-
What the fuck do you know?
Zodiac is a bit of an idiot - read his work if you want proof - ignore him, he just goes around trying to besmirch everyone's work when actually he is a bit of a dunce himself. I like this poem and certainly feel the last couple of lines are powerful. -9-