I meant, leave out "in it"

Write something so powerful you want to puke.

Thanks for positive comment. I did ponder on the spelling of "revelling" but my English dictionary says double L, so I went with that rather than the Americanism of the Microsoft spell check !

The point of diminishing returns is quite the hangnail.

do what?

Even a lobotomized logician’s got feelings.

Thanks, and I agree with you. Cut down on the "chorus" and I like it more. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

Now it's my turn to say, calm down. I’ll admit to indulging in what (correct if I misinterpret) you see as possibly feminist words. I don’t like to think of them as feminist (meaning to promote female esteem) but rather feminine (expressing a female point of view). I don’t want this poem seen as a position that favors women. Rather I want it to show how a woman feels when a man is sensitive enough to say words that raise her self-respect and make her feel that he sees more in her than she previously saw in herself, and in addition when he connects her with her history. A woman might have provided that for me or a gay man (I have a couple of gay friends) but when added to the conversation, I feel the nuzzle of his nose on my ear, and purely masculine emotional support, well, the thing was overwhelming.