Re: a comment on After a Show at the Lyceum by andrew barnes	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/12:58 PM
I meant, leave out "in it"
Re: a comment on MTV's The Real World: Poemranker by Bluemonkey	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/12:54 PM
Write something so powerful you want to puke.
Re: a comment on After a Show at the Lyceum by andrew barnes	andrew barnes 80.195.91.19	24-May-05/12:54 PM
Thanks for positive comment. I did ponder on the spelling of "revelling" but my English dictionary says double L, so I went with that rather than the Americanism of the Microsoft spell check !
Re: a comment on Rock of the Earth by ingwa	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.204	24-May-05/11:44 AM
The point of diminishing returns is quite the hangnail.
Re: Untitled by camperdfl	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/11:29 AM
Yes, sweet retribution. Kill him, that'll fix the matter.
Re: Semite to Semite by PodPoet	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/11:26 AM
You should set off the refrain some way, indented perhaps, Maybe call this a lyric. Most of this is good, but "worship" goes too far.
Re: a comment on MTV's The Real World: Poemranker by Bluemonkey	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	24-May-05/11:17 AM
do what?
Re: MTV's The Real World: Poemranker by Bluemonkey	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/11:14 AM
Wish I could do that.
Re: Kerri & Terri by jessicazee	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/10:55 AM
"skim layers of skin" - that lava soap did that. Didn't know you lived next door.
Re: The Jesus Belt by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/10:49 AM
Good. Just a few take-it-or-leave-its: "and belief turned lies"? "A father's seed"? "made to bleed"?
Re: Ungrateful by Damien_	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	24-May-05/10:45 AM
"I am Ungrateful, Ungratefully.... That's simply fucking awful, man.
Re: a comment on Swoon by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/10:18 AM
Even a lobotomized logician’s got feelings.
Re: Kerri & Terri by jessicazee	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	24-May-05/9:26 AM
The nostalgia greys out under all this summing up.
Re: Kerri & Terri by jessicazee	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.145	24-May-05/8:50 AM
Ah...nostalgia! Pass the catsup and don't forget to bring in the wash off the line after dinner.
Re: Swoon by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.145	24-May-05/8:40 AM
Quite a departure from your usual style.
Re: a comment on Semite to Semite by PodPoet	PodPoet 68.6.188.203	23-May-05/8:58 PM
Thanks, and I agree with you. Cut down on the "chorus" and I like it more. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Re: Semite to Semite by PodPoet	wilco 24.165.207.93	23-May-05/8:40 PM
I don't know that this is a concrete...I'm a fan of repetition to some extend but I think it's too much here. Try the "deep dark eyes part mybe every third or fourth stanza...
Re: Spontaneous Combustion by wilco	wilco 24.165.207.93	23-May-05/8:27 PM
So, what happened? I leave for a while and Rockmage comes back filled with old hippie hatred for everything and plasters everyone with zeroes? I'm a little confused.
Re: a comment on Swoon by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	23-May-05/7:18 PM
Now it's my turn to say, calm down. I’ll admit to indulging in what (correct if I misinterpret) you see as possibly feminist words. I don’t like to think of them as feminist (meaning to promote female esteem) but rather feminine (expressing a female point of view). I don’t want this poem seen as a position that favors women. Rather I want it to show how a woman feels when a man is sensitive enough to say words that raise her self-respect and make her feel that he sees more in her than she previously saw in herself, and in addition when he connects her with her history. A woman might have provided that for me or a gay man (I have a couple of gay friends) but when added to the conversation, I feel the nuzzle of his nose on my ear, and purely masculine emotional support, well, the thing was overwhelming.
Re: Ungrateful by Damien_	middenHeap 80.132.239.3	23-May-05/7:09 PM
you're such an ugly-souled little cousinfucker.