Re: Izzy's Last Night by jessicazee	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	27-May-05/6:28 AM
Too much proze for my taste. 'is already wrote'??
Re: Last Night by Roisin	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	27-May-05/6:27 AM
Just one remark: 'closed'. A cycle cannot be closed or opened. Unless you mean that breaking out of her cycle causes the hurt. But I don't think so.
Re: Izzy's Last Night by jessicazee	Roisin 80.3.64.12	27-May-05/3:30 AM
Moving and interesting. Could do with more clues to the relationship, history between these two. First two lines a little slow for the pace of the rest of the poem.
Re: Swoon by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.156	27-May-05/2:29 AM
Except for the "while he includes you in a unique line of womanhood - sesible, respectful, fun" bit, this is the best you've ever written.
Re: a comment on Talia Eternal by Enkidu	zodiac 212.118.19.156	27-May-05/2:27 AM
This is my favorite comment on poemranker lately.
Re: To Making Do by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.156	27-May-05/2:27 AM
"exes".
Re: a comment on Mid Years by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.156	27-May-05/2:24 AM
Well, I have to repeat: I'm in a stable, mindbogglingly pleasurable relationship and have been for years, while you, judging from your poems and comments, are not. I don't mean any offense; consider it in the line of advice.
Re: Making a Mark by andrew barnes	zodiac 212.118.19.156	27-May-05/2:17 AM
There is no reason to believe some art from our time won't make it past the next epic disaster. Um, proto-human art DID survive the last ice age. Of course, most of that was just interestingly shaped rocks. I thought "stray nuclear warhead" was funny, though. Like it was just looking for the loo and got lost.
Re: In the aspens by sliver	Dental Panic 84.31.86.195	27-May-05/1:57 AM
Sure. Just center it and it looks like an inscription on a memorial. It's postcard poetry. The voice needs a little reverberation here. The words don't do the job.
Re: a comment on Nesting Instinct of Women by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.156	27-May-05/1:40 AM
Christ, I'm glad that's resolved. Is the following true? 1) -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I. believes there are a finite number of correct interpretations for a poem, i.e., the interpreter has gotten at an idea or meaning the author deliberately included. He probably thinks this because he's British. 2) Dovina believes there are a nearly infinite number of correct interpretations for a poem, as the author can have unwittingly (and/or through a practiced use of ambiguity) included a bunch of ideas which he or she wasn't aware of while writing. She probably thinks that because she lives in California. Not that any of this matters anyway, but it seems the conversation's stuck in that bog for at least one of you.
Re: a comment on Star Studded Supermarket by [mojo]	[mojo] 80.58.44.44	27-May-05/12:22 AM
Thanks for that. Believe me I know this one is pretty rough, technically! I just wrote it in one hit and afterwards it seemed too long to be bothered to to edit n tweak! I know ...I'm lazy ...it's that whole balancing the fun with the work thing :) Care for the job? I'll paypal you 50p (that's about $135 i think) to do the editing for me? ha ha.
Re: a comment on Star Studded Supermarket by [mojo]	[mojo] 80.58.44.44	27-May-05/12:19 AM
really? Spelling? Oh, woops! Come on! Give me some credit I checked Swartzeneger and just assumed I got the others right! ha ha. I'll check them just for you.
Re: Crossing the Mojave by INTRANSIT	jessicazee 64.12.116.135	26-May-05/9:41 PM
Firebirds and cold leather souls are enough to win me over. 9.3.
Re: Coffined by Dovina	jessicazee 64.12.116.135	26-May-05/9:40 PM
I'm refraining from reading other comments and offer a 9.1. Good for me, if only right now.
Re: a comment on Horatio by april fool	sliver 172.198.81.177	26-May-05/8:55 PM
Are you by chance referring to Horatio Hornblower?
Re: A backsliders struggle by nicole081083	sliver 172.198.81.177	26-May-05/8:51 PM
I really liked this, mostly because it sounds like something I would have written.I especially like the part about forgetting your song. superb..
Re: Lower than low by nicole081083	sliver 172.198.81.177	26-May-05/8:48 PM
I would say 'that heaven let me in' in the first stanza. See how it flows better that way? A few other spots that seem to bog down a bit. A positive message, but I think you need repentance, also, for that forgiveness.
Re: Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT	sliver 172.198.81.177	26-May-05/8:45 PM
I think perhaps the coroner would be better suited to clean up this mess.
Re: Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT	Dental Panic 84.31.86.195	26-May-05/8:23 PM
Just one more pipe and I'll get out of the zero drop zone. I'll rate this one some time hobbing on the Eyeball Massacre Train. Axial, that is.
Re: a comment on Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.138	26-May-05/7:14 PM
No I prefer the big rubber Dinosaurs with the squeeker located smack where the ... OH MY GAWD! I'M OUTTA CONTROL! Uno mas? Por favor?