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Izzy's Last Night (Free verse) by jessicazee
I cry because you are moving to Minneapolis, I have never been there, because Nick died there, you can’t die there, too. I spilled all my guts to you last night at the Y-Not III, my pinked parts, my crush, my sad stories, you told jokes older than your own self, George Carlin’s obituary is already wrote, by you, you sewed two skull patches on one hoodie, your story, blushing in punk rock surplus, I told you a butterfly patch would be nice. A butterfly, you said. A pretty one. With eyes in its wings. I didn’t disagree, our kiss shorter than I’d hoped.

Up the ladder: a toast to the sky
Down the ladder: Passion

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.6666667
Weighted score: 4.8410625
Overall Rank: 10731
Posted: May 26, 2005 9:38 PM PDT; Last modified: May 26, 2005 9:38 PM PDT
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Comments:
[7] Roisin @ 80.3.64.12 | 27-May-05/3:30 AM | Reply
Moving and interesting. Could do with more clues to the relationship, history between these two. First two lines a little slow for the pace of the rest of the poem.
[4] deleted user @ 81.69.23.196 | 27-May-05/6:28 AM | Reply
Too much proze for my taste.
'is already wrote'??
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